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I have a big news. we will stay in sigarpore for a year from this Agust. My husband is profesor so he will be on sabbatical this term. It was his choose. If he refuse that we don’t go there but he never get a opputunity to go to abroad on sabbatical and he just would annual leave in korea. We considered that which choose is good for my son. usually when at a grade 4~5 around, it start to hard training to improve study level. My son is 10 years and he get into regullar korean system. I didn't think about an international school or studying abroad for him.

I have a big news. we will stay in sigarpore for a year from this Agust. My husband is profesor so he will be on sabbatical this term. It was his choose. If he refuse that we don’t go there but he never get a opputunity to go to abroad on sabbatical and he just would annual leave in korea. We considered that which choose is good for my son. usually when at a grade 4~5 around, it start to hard training to improve study level. My son is 10 years and he get into regullar korean system. I didn't think about an international school or studying abroad for him.
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Corrections and Explanations:

  1. Original: I have a big news.
    Corrected: I have big news.
    Explanation: "News" is an uncountable noun, so we don’t use “a” before it.

  2. Original: we will stay in sigarpore for a year from this Agust.
    Corrected: We will stay in Singapore for a year starting this August.
    Explanation: Capitalization (We, Singapore, August); spelling (Singapore, August); smoother phrasing: “starting this August.”

  3. Original: My husband is profesor so he will be on sabbatical this term.
    Corrected: My husband is a professor, so he will be on sabbatical this term.
    Explanation: Article "a" before profession; spelling ("profesor" → "professor"); added comma for clarity.

  4. Original: It was his choose.
    Corrected: It was his choice.
    Explanation: “Choose” is a verb; the correct noun form is “choice.”

  5. Original: If he refuse that we don’t go there but he never get a opputunity to go to abroad on sabbatical and he just would annual leave in korea.
    Corrected: If he refused, we wouldn’t go there. But he never got an opportunity to go abroad on sabbatical, and he would have just taken annual leave in Korea.
    Explanation: Tense corrections (refuse → refused, get → got); article use ("an opportunity"); grammar fix for conditional sentence.

  6. Original: We considered that which choose is good for my son.
    Corrected: We considered which choice would be better for our son.
    Explanation: Word use ("choose" → "choice"); proper phrasing with conditional structure.

  7. Original: usually when at a grade 4~5 around, it start to hard training to improve study level.
    Corrected: Usually, around grades 4 to 5, students begin more intensive training to improve their academic level.
    Explanation: Grammar fix and more natural expression.

  8. Original: My son is 10 years and he get into regullar korean system.
    Corrected: My son is 10 years old and has been following the regular Korean education system.
    Explanation: Add “old” for age; tense correction (“get into” → “has been following”); spelling ("regullar" → "regular").

  9. Original: I didn't think about an international school or studying abroad for him.
    Corrected: ✅ (Already acceptable!)
    Note: This sentence is already fine.


Final Edited Version:

I have big news. We will stay in Singapore for a year starting this August. My husband is a professor, so he will be on sabbatical this term. It was his choice. If he had refused, we wouldn’t go there. But he has never had the opportunity to go abroad on sabbatical, and otherwise he would have just taken annual leave in Korea.
We considered which choice would be better for our son. Usually, around grades 4 to 5, students begin more intensive training to improve their academic level.
My son is 10 years old and has been following the regular Korean education system. I hadn’t thought about enrolling him in an international school or studying abroad before.


 

Hi Ms. Yoon! That's exciting news! Living in Singapore will be a great opportunity for you and your family. I'm sure your son will learn so much from this new experience. Just enjoy your time there and take it as a wonderful chance to grow and explore together!


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