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Last night, we decided to go to the laundromat the next day, earlier than usual. My mom needed to catch up on our laundry. She made some kimbap and packed it into two containers. We stopped by the convenience store on the way and got some drinks and snacks. It seemed just like a picnic. We enjoyed eating our lunch while we were at the laundromat. I also studied English, science, and ethics there. This time, I took my English class at home. It was good and time flies.

Last night, we decided to go to the laundromat the next day, earlier than usual. My mom needed to catch up on our laundry. She made some kimbap and packed it into two containers. We stopped by the convenience store on the way and got some drinks and snacks. It seemed just like a picnic. We enjoyed eating our lunch while we were at the laundromat. I also studied English, science, and ethics there. This time, I took my English class at home. It was good and time flies.
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🔹 Here are the corrections:


Original: Last night, we decided to go to the laundromat the next day, earlier than usual.
Corrected:Correct as is.
Explanation: This sentence is clear and grammatically correct.


Original: My mom needed to catch up on our laundry.
Corrected:Correct as is.
Explanation: No changes needed. It clearly shows what Mom had to do.


Original: She made some kimbap and packed it into two containers.
Corrected:Correct as is.
Explanation: This sentence is clear and correct.


Original: We stopped by the convenience store on the way and got some drinks and snacks.
Corrected:Correct as is.
Explanation: This sentence is fine and easy to understand.


Original: It seemed just like a picnic.
Corrected:Correct as is.
Explanation: No grammar issues. This is a nice comparison!


Original: We enjoyed eating our lunch while we were at the laundromat.
Corrected:Correct as is.
Explanation: The sentence is clear and complete.


Original: I also studied English, science, and ethics there.
Corrected:Correct as is.
Explanation: This sentence is correct and easy to follow.


Original: This time, I took my English class at home.
Corrected:Correct as is.
Explanation: Good sentence. The meaning is clear.


Original: It was good and time flies.
Corrected: It was good, and time flew by.
Explanation: Use past tense “flew” because it already happened. Also, add a comma before “and” to connect the two ideas properly.


Final Edited Text:

Last night, we decided to go to the laundromat the next day, earlier than usual. My mom needed to catch up on our laundry. She made some kimbap and packed it into two containers. We stopped by the convenience store on the way and got some drinks and snacks. It seemed just like a picnic. We enjoyed eating our lunch while we were at the laundromat. I also studied English, science, and ethics there. This time, I took my English class at home. It was good, and time flew by.

Hi  MIn! You did a great job describing your day clearly! Your writing shows good use of past tense and a variety of vocabulary. I especially liked how you included small details, like eating kimbap and studying different subjects - it made your story more interesting. Keep up the good work, and continue practicing full sentences and using descriptive language to make your writing more effective!

 


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