Today, I vomited after running about two minutes at the fencing academy. I thought it was because I had lunch and a big glass cup of strawberry smoothie just before the class. Wherever I went, it was cool inside and hot outside as well. I realized that I shouldn't eat a lot and then exercise right away. I was able to train again after relaxing a little, and I learned two fencing terms, "une-deux-trois" and "contre." What a difficulty!
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Here are the corrections:
Original: Today, I vomited after running about two minutes at the fencing academy.
Corrected: Today, I vomited after running for about two minutes at the fencing academy.
Explanation: Use "for" to show the duration of time.
Original: I thought it was because I had lunch and a big glass cup of strawberry smoothie just before the class.
Corrected: I thought it was because I had lunch and a big glass of strawberry smoothie just before the class.
Explanation: "Glass" already means a container, so "glass cup" is unnecessary—"a big glass of..." is natural.
Original: Wherever I went, it was cool inside and hot outside as well.
Corrected: Everywhere I went, it was cool inside and hot outside.
Explanation: "Wherever" is okay, but "everywhere" fits better here. Also, "as well" is not needed at the end.
Original: I realized that I shouldn't eat a lot and then exercise right away.
Corrected: ✅ (Already correct!)
Explanation: Well done! This sentence is natural and clear.
Original: I was able to train again after relaxing a little, and I learned two fencing terms, "une-deux-trois" and "contre."
Corrected: ✅ (Also correct!)
Explanation: Very nice! This sentence is well written.
Original: What a difficulty!
Corrected: What a challenge!
Explanation: "Difficulty" is a noun but sounds unnatural here. We usually say "What a challenge!" or "That was difficult!"
Final Edited Text
Today, I vomited after running for about two minutes at the fencing academy. I thought it was because I had lunch and a big glass of strawberry smoothie just before the class. Everywhere I went, it was cool inside and hot outside. I realized that I shouldn't eat a lot and then exercise right away. I was able to train again after relaxing a little, and I learned two fencing terms, "une-deux-trois" and "contre." What a challenge!
Hi Min! You did a great job sharing your experience clearly! Your sentences are organized and easy to follow. Just be careful with small things like prepositions ("for" with time) and natural word choices like "glass of" or "challenge." Keep writing about your real-life experiences - they're fun to read and excellent for practice. Keep it up!
