We met old friend who is knowing each other since we lived in Hong Kong. The kids are friends. We met in kindergarten. His mom is korean and kindly so we could get along closer quickly. They went to canada there is his dad hometown. After we went back each country we would met in korea once a years when they come here to visit their grandparent. Even though it's been a while our kids hit the off and played kid gym. He couldn't speak korean than last years. But we could good time in each thoughful.
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✅ Here are the corrections:
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❌ We met old friend who is knowing each other since we lived in Hong Kong.
✅ We met an old friend who has known us since we lived in Hong Kong.
🔎 Explanation:
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Add “an” before “old friend” (needs an article).
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Use “has known” for a friendship that started in the past and continues.
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“Is knowing” is incorrect—“know” is a non-continuous verb.
2.
❌ The kids are friends.
✅ Our kids are friends.
🔎 Explanation:
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"The kids" is okay, but “our kids” makes the connection clearer.
3.
❌ We met in kindergarten.
✅ They met in kindergarten.
🔎 Explanation:
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Based on the context, it was the kids who met in kindergarten, not the parents.
4.
❌ His mom is korean and kindly so we could get along closer quickly.
✅ His mom is Korean and kind, so we were able to become close quickly.
🔎 Explanation:
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Capitalize “Korean” (a nationality).
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“Kindly” is an adverb—use “kind” (adjective).
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“Get along closer” → “become close” is more natural.
5.
❌ They went to canada there is his dad hometown.
✅ They moved to Canada, which is his dad’s hometown.
🔎 Explanation:
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Capitalize “Canada.”
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Combine the two parts with “which.”
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Add apostrophe in “dad’s” for possession.
6.
❌ After we went back each country we would met in korea once a years when they come here to visit their grandparent.
✅ After we returned to our countries, we would meet in Korea once a year when they visited their grandparents.
🔎 Explanation:
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“Went back each country” → “returned to our countries” is clearer.
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“Met” → “meet” (base form after “would”).
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“Once a years” → “once a year” (singular).
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“Grandparent” → “grandparents” (plural).
7.
❌ Even though it's been a while our kids hit the off and played kid gym.
✅ Even though it’s been a while, our kids hit it off and played at the kids’ gym.
🔎 Explanation:
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Add a comma after “a while.”
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“Hit the off” → “hit it off” is the correct expression.
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“Kid gym” → “kids’ gym” (possessive form).
8.
❌ He couldn't speak korean than last years.
✅ He couldn’t speak Korean as well as he could last year.
🔎 Explanation:
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Capitalize “Korean.”
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Use “as well as” to compare ability.
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“Last years” → “last year” (singular).
9.
❌ But we could good time in each thoughful.
✅ But we still had a good time and were thoughtful toward each other.
🔎 Explanation:
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“Could good time” → “had a good time” is the correct phrase.
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“Each thoughtful” is unclear—rephrased for clarity.
Final Edited Version:
We met an old friend who has known us since we lived in Hong Kong. Our kids are friends - they met in kindergarten. His mom is Korean and kind, so we were able to become close quickly. They moved to Canada, which is his dad’s hometown. After we returned to our countries, we would meet in Korea once a year when they visited their grandparents. Even though it’s been a while, our kids hit it off and played at the kids’ gym. He couldn’t speak Korean as well as he could last year, but we still had a good time and were thoughtful toward each other.
"Great effort on your composition, Ms. Yoon! You expressed your memories and friendship story clearly, and I could feel the warmth in your writing. To make your sentences even stronger, try to focus on correct verb tenses and sentence structure. Watch out for small grammar points like articles ("a," "the") and correct word forms. Keep writing - you’re doing great, and your storytelling is already very engaging!"
