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University athletic department funding

In order to prepare their students academically and help their graduatesfind jobs, many universities fund thier libraries and other acdemic facilities at the expense of sports activities. In the "real world," sports are considered waste of time at worst and a pleasant diversion at best. However, sports improve students' physical health and social skills. Therefore, universities should invest an equal amount of money in both their students' sports activities and school libraries.
To begin with, sports activies play a pivotal role in promoting students'physical health. Many studies show exercise strength bones, muscles, etc. For exmaple, my obese cousin lost weight after stared regular walking.
Also, sports activities foster students'social skills. Sports activities require collective effort and cooperation. The best example of this is a soccer game. When participating in soccer games, students have the chance to learn how to cooperate and work as a team. To win at the game, every teammember should cheer each other and strive together for the common goal.
To summarize, funding to athletic depart funding at university is necessart. It is advatageous in terms of students' health and thier social skills.

In order to prepare their students academically and help their graduatesfind jobs, many universities fund thier libraries and other acdemic facilities at the expense of sports activities. In the "real world," sports are considered waste of time at worst and a pleasant diversion at best. However, sports improve students' physical health and social skills. Therefore, universities should invest an equal amount of money in both their students' sports activities and school libraries.
To begin with, sports activies play a pivotal role in promoting students'physical health. Many studies show exercise strength bones, muscles, etc. For exmaple, my obese cousin lost weight after stared regular walking.
Also, sports activities foster students'social skills. Sports activities require collective effort and cooperation. The best example of this is a soccer game. When participating in soccer games, students have the chance to learn how to cooperate and work as a team. To win at the game, every teammember should cheer each other and strive together for the common goal.
To summarize, funding to athletic depart funding at university is necessart. It is advatageous in terms of students' health and thier social skills.

 

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In order to prepare the students academically and help the graduates to find their jobs,Their are a lot of university.who funds their libraries and other academic facilities at the expense  of sports activities. In the "Real World", sports are  considered as a waste of time at worst and a pleasant diversion at it's best. However, sports improve student's physical health and social skills. Therefore,universities should invest an equal amount of money in both student's sports activities and school libraries.

To begin with, sports activities play a pivotal role in promoting student's physical health. Many studies shows exercise strengthen the bnes,muscles and etc.For example,my obese cousin lost weight after she started regular walking.Also, sports activities foster student's social skills. Sports activities require collective effort and cooperation. The best example of this is a soccer game. When you participated in a soccer game,students have the chance to learn how to cooperate and work as a team. To win the game,every team members should cheer each other and strive together for the common goal.
 

To summarize,funding to athletic department of a university is necessary. It is advantageous in terms of student's health and their social skills.


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