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The stray cats living near my house recently produced two lovely kittens. The black tabby is timid, but the yellow tabby is curious, so the mother cat is always guarding them. She looked busy, but it seems like she's kind of given up now. Last night, my mom saw Yellow, who was hanging in the area of pots, on the way back after throwing away the garbage. Somehow, the small aloe pot was often knocked over. It's definitely playful. Every time I see them, I feel pleasant.

The stray cats living near my house recently produced two lovely kittens. The black tabby is timid, but the yellow tabby is curious, so the mother cat is always guarding them. She looked busy, but it seems like she's kind of given up now. Last night, my mom saw Yellow, who was hanging in the area of pots, on the way back after throwing away the garbage. Somehow, the small aloe pot was often knocked over. It's definitely playful. Every time I see them, I feel pleasant.
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Here are the corrections and explanations:


Original:
The stray cats living near my house recently produced two lovely kittens.
Corrected:
The stray cats living near my house recently had two lovely kittens.
Explanation:
“Produced” is grammatically correct, but “had” is more natural and commonly used when talking about animals giving birth.


Original:
The black tabby is timid, but the yellow tabby is curious, so the mother cat is always guarding them.
Corrected:
The black tabby is timid, but the yellow tabby is curious, so their mother is always guarding them.
Explanation:
“Mother cat” is fine, but “their mother” flows better and avoids repetition.


Original:
She looked busy, but it seems like she's kind of given up now.
Corrected:
She looked busy, but it seems like she has kind of given up now.
Explanation:
Consistency in tense: “has given up” is the correct present perfect form.


Original:
Last night, my mom saw Yellow, who was hanging in the area of pots, on the way back after throwing away the garbage.
Corrected:
Last night, my mom saw Yellow hanging around the potted plants on her way back from taking out the garbage.
Explanation:

  • “Hanging in the area of pots” is awkward → “hanging around the potted plants” is clearer.

  • “On the way back after throwing away the garbage” → simplified to “on her way back from taking out the garbage.”


Original:
Somehow, the small aloe pot was often knocked over.
Corrected:
Somehow, the small aloe pot keeps getting knocked over.
Explanation:
“To be often knocked over” is awkward. Use present tense for a recurring action.


Original:
It's definitely playful.
Corrected:
He is definitely playful. (Or "She" depending on the kitten's gender.)
Explanation:
Since you are referring to Yellow (a kitten), use he or she instead of “it” for a more natural and warm tone.


Original:
Every time I see them, I feel pleasant.
Corrected:
Every time I see them, I feel happy.
Explanation:
“Pleasant” is usually used to describe things, not emotions. Use “happy” to describe how you feel.


Final Edited Text:

The stray cats living near my house recently had two lovely kittens. The black tabby is timid, but the yellow tabby is curious, so their mother is always guarding them. She looked busy, but it seems like she has kind of given up now. Last night, my mom saw Yellow hanging around the potted plants on her way back from taking out the garbage. Somehow, the small aloe pot keeps getting knocked over. He is definitely playful. Every time I see them, I feel happy.


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