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some believe unpaid community service should be compulsory part of high school programmes. agree?

Recently,as far as volunteering is becoming more and more important, there are opinions that free comunity service should be fulfilled essentially by the students of secondary school. Although the policy has a disadvantage that it is a compulsory service,I agree with this idea.
Providing support to the poors for free might have a couple of drawbacks as follows. It is compulsory policy, not from their own mind. Volunteering only exists when its original meaning implies. For example, the high school students under this program might help the neighbours with souless mind and they would only want to get the certificate that could prove how much time they help others. It might become an irritating homework, not volunteering from mind.
Nevertheless this disadvantage, it would improve our society much better.If this program which help others is performed, the children who couldn't learn because of money can get a chance to learn equally like others. In modern society, the parents who have their son or daughter student might want only to study for entering to a college. But it is very selfish. If we hope our society becomes better,contributing their ability would be essential. In some cases of Finland which is famous for welfare, the program enhance the students' ritual so, since the compulsory service was started, the notion for helping others in person has been common.For the reasons mentioned above, I totally agree with the opinion because making students help others by force will in the near future,make their ritual be altruistic. It would be the road to go developed country.

Recently,as far as volunteering is becoming more and more important, there are opinions that free comunity service should be fulfilled essentially by the students of secondary school. Although the policy has a disadvantage that it is a compulsory service,I agree with this idea.
Providing support to the poors for free might have a couple of drawbacks as follows. It is compulsory policy, not from their own mind. Volunteering only exists when its original meaning implies. For example, the high school students under this program might help the neighbours with souless mind and they would only want to get the certificate that could prove how much time they help others. It might become an irritating homework, not volunteering from mind.
Nevertheless this disadvantage, it would improve our society much better.If this program which help others is performed, the children who couldn't learn because of money can get a chance to learn equally like others. In modern society, the parents who have their son or daughter student might want only to study for entering to a college. But it is very selfish. If we hope our society becomes better,contributing their ability would be essential. In some cases of Finland which is famous for welfare, the program enhance the students' ritual so, since the compulsory service was started, the notion for helping others in person has been common.For the reasons mentioned above, I totally agree with the opinion because making students help others by force will in the near future,make their ritual be altruistic. It would be the road to go developed country.

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Recently, as far as volunteering is becoming more and more important. There are opinions that free community service should be fulfilled essentially by the students from secondary school. Although, the policy has a disadvantage and it is a compulsory service. I agree with this idea.

Providing support to the poor for free might have a couple of drawbacks as follows. It is compulsory policy, not from their own will. Volunteering only exists when its original meaning implies. For example, high school students under this program might help their neighbours with soulless mind. And, they would only want to get the certificate that could prove how much time they help others. It might become an irritating task for them and it will not be executed properly or genuinely.

Nevertheless, this disadvantage would improve our society. If this program which help others is performed, the children who couldn't learn because of money can get a chance to learn equally like others. In modern society, the parents who have their son or daughter might want only to study to enter a good university. But, it is very unfair for them. If we hope our society to become much better, contributing their ability would be essential. In some cases, for example in Finland which is famous for welfare, the program enhanced the students' practice since the compulsory service was started. The notion for helping others in person has been common. For the reasons mentioned above, I totally agree with the opinion because making students help others as part of their practices would help them in the near future. Make them be more altruistic. It would be the road to have developed country.

 

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