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Female main chracter

Female main chracter : Han yu rum.

She is 32 years old. Her job is furniture designer and representative of furniture company "여름과 소나무"

Drama writer Shin yun hee's daugter, She lives together with 2 frineds in the house which under the name of her mother.

She has been raised independently since she was young. Her mother wirtes her promissory note
and borrow the money when she start furniture business. Additionally, her mother demands monthly payment for house rent fee.

So, She become very smart and prick-up, because of her background.

She is very positive, cherrful and brigjtness..

If something is profitable, she can act charming and buy someone's patronage with flattery

Especially in term of dating, she is a master of playing game.
she knows exactly what she wants. She can lead opponent to her own pace.


She has been dating for 2 years with her boy friend Sung jun (plastic surgeon)
Their relationship is too very natural and intimate to come by thier homes,
They naver hide to show their love to roommate friends.

Friends are urging to get marry. They don't think about marriage.

In the process of stable dating with him, She met the first love 'Ta ha', coincidently.
Her first kiss is him. and she dated for 5 years.

At this moment, What happen to 3 of them in future?

Female main character : Han yu rum.

Han yu rum is 32 years old. Her job is furniture designer and representative of furniture company "여름과 소나무".

(You need to write the name of the character on your first sentence.)

Drama writer Shin yun hee's daughter. Han yu rum lives together with her 2 friends in the house which is under the name of her mother. 
(Is Shin yun hee the mother of Han yu rum? If yes, the correct sentence then is “Her mother is Shin yun hee, a drama writer.” )
She has been raised independently since she was young. Her mother writes her promissory note
and borrow money when she start furniture business. (Please elaborate this idea.) Additionally, her mother demands monthly payment for house rent.

So, she became very smart and prick-up (I don’t understand what you mean by this word), because of her background.


She is very positive, cheerful and bright. (brightness is noun. Bright is adjective that means intelligent or clever.)

If something is profitable, she can act charming and buy someone's patronage with flattery. 

Especially in terms of dating, she is a master of playing games.
She knows exactly what she wants. She can lead opponent to her own pace.


She has been dating for 2 years with her boy friend Sung jun (a plastic surgeon).
Their relationship is too (too very is redundant) natural and intimate to come to their homes. 

They never hide their love to roommate friends. (or you can say “They are never shy to show their love to their roommates.)

Friends are urging them to get marry. They don't think about marriage.

(Note: in a sentence, words are related to each other. Like “Friends are urging WHO: him TO WHAT: to get marry.)

In the process of stable dating with him, She met her first love 'Ta ha', coincidently.
Her first kiss is with him and she dated him for 5 years.


(Note: in a sentence, words are related to each other. Like “She dated WHO: him HOW LONG: for 5 years.)


What will happen to the 3 of them in future?


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