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Finding ring through social media.

I never thought that if I could wear my ring again.
After this ring was left at CLUB ONE 15 during night time,
The ring has gone around in social media.
I didn't know where I had lost it whether to wash hand in the bathroom or take out money from pocket
She realized that she lost her ring on saturday.(It was not until saturday that she lost her ring)
"I didn't know about that, my husband noticed that, I was surprised that."
But, her ring was in safe place, it is stored under the safe at brick town.
A bartender assistant found out diamond ring on the floor,
Even if it was under big arrow in plain view but it didn't discover the ring.
According to procedure(seting from restaurant), the ring kept in safe.
And after that day, it was first time to hear about ring through social media.
Through post which updated hot issue, he was heard from facebook about the ring.
I knew close friends share the ring issue through social media for me.
Like close friends are share the post, their other close friends also did that.
The post was spread out to 2,500 people, one of them was Adam.

He said " I got from message from a lady, she said that she heard if you may have the ring,
so, do you have ring? I never exchange anything fact that i trust my employee, even though it is little thing.

To Alisa naver exchange the ring with anything.

Diamond in ring was father in law who died when my husband was 10 years old.
some day, She will leave ring to my son. He will be delieverd rings from Grandfather who naver meet.

I never thought that if I could wear my ring again.
After this ring was left at CLUB ONE 15 during night time, the ring has gone around in social media. 
I didn't know where I had lost it whether
to when I washed my hands in the bathroom or I took out money from my pocket.
She I realized that I lost my ring on Saturday. (It was not until Saturday that she I lost my ring)

(NOTE: Since you started the story with first person: I, the whole idea should use first person.)
"I didn't know about that. My husband noticed that. I was surprised."
But,
her my ring was in safe place, it was stored under the safe at brick town.
A bartender assistant found
out  the diamond ring on the floor.
Even if it was under big arrow in plain view,
but the ring was not discovered.
According to the procedure (setting from restaurant), the ring was kept safe.
After that day, it was the first time to hear the ring issue through social media.
Through the post, which was updated as a hot issue, he saw the ring issue from Facebook.

“Close friends shared the ring issue through social media to me.
Like close friends shared the post, their other close friends also did that.
The post was spread out to 2,500 people, one of them was Adam.

He said "I got from the message from a lady, she said, “Do you have ring? If you have the ring, please give it back. I trust my employees. I will never exchange that trust with anything.
To Alisa, never exchange the ring with anything.

Diamond ring
was from my father in law who died when my husband was 10 years old.
Someday, I will leave the ring to my son. He will inherit the ring from his Grandfather whom he never met.


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