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Mr.X who kills two daughter and wife was arrested by police man.
Accoding to police man, he took by car passing by national highway,
The patrol car bump into him.

The patrol car U-turn immediately.
Chasing after him about 1 km, finally the police man block front and then arrest him.

Mr.X reported to 119 that he twisted wife and daughters neck and killed them. i will suidcide.

but he run away along the highway.

The poice who reported calling from him found out his wife and 2 daughter's body.

While he arreted, he wore green round shirt and black pants. he had no resistnace to the police.


The police man moved him to police office and invetigated a crime.

The policeman couldn't find out the dead body's marks of resistance.

It has been 3 years since he lost his job.

The policeman predict he might be killed his family becausse of hardships of life.

Netizens who saw the article, They felt sorrowful

Mr. X who killed two daughters and wife was arrested by police man.

 

(Note: You need to use “killed” since Mr. X did it already. If the daughter and wife are Mr. X’s family, you may say “Mr. X who killed his two daughters and his wife….”)


Original: According to police man, he took by car passing by national highway,
The patrol car bump into him.

 

Correction: According to the police man, he’s driving the patrol car by national highway when Mr. X’s car bumped his patrol car.

The patrol car U-turned immediately.
Chasing after him
for about 1 km, finally the police man blocked the way of Mr. X and then he arrested him.

(Note:  we use “for” when measuring time, length, weight etc.)

Mr.X reported to 119 that he twisted his wife and daughters neck and killed them. Then, he will suicide but he ran away along the highway.

The policeman, who got the report found out his wife and 2 daughter's body.

When he was arrested, he wore green round shirt and black pants. He had no resistance to the police.


The police man moved him to police office and investigated
the crime.

(Note: since you told the crime from the first part of the story, you need to use the article “the” if you are talking about Mr.X’s crime. Since I know the crime already. Because if you will use “a crime”, that means you are talking about different crime.)

The policeman couldn't find out the dead body's marks of resistance.

It has been 3 years since he lost his job.

The policeman predicted he might killed his family because of hardships in life.

Netizens who saw the article felt sorrow.


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