Today, it was announced the result of the secondary GED. I passed, and well, I was happy. Afternoon, my mom and I visited the Seoul Metropolitan Office of Education, and I got my certificate of acceptance. Then we went to the cafe(an error occurs when entering an accent) nearby. I ordered a jambon beurre sandwich and iced tea. At that time, it showered heavily all of a sudden. We were worried because we didn't take our umbrellas. But the rain stopped while we finished our meals, like a miracle!
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Here are the corrections:
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Original:
Today, it was announced the result of the secondary GED.
Corrected:
Today, the result of the secondary GED was announced.
Explanation:
The word order was a little mixed up. In English, we usually say what happened after the subject. So instead of starting with "it was announced," we begin with "the result... was announced." -
Original:
I passed, and well, I was happy.
Corrected:
I passed, and, well, I was happy.
Explanation:
Just added a comma after "and" to show a small pause, because "well" is a small word we say when we're thinking or showing emotion. -
Original:
Afternoon, my mom and I visited the Seoul Metropolitan Office of Education...
Corrected:
In the afternoon, my mom and I visited the Seoul Metropolitan Office of Education...
Explanation:
We need "In the" before "afternoon" to make it a full time expression. Just saying “Afternoon” is incomplete. -
Original:
Then we went to the cafe(an error occurs when entering an accent) nearby.
Corrected:
Then we went to a nearby café (it’s hard to type the accent sometimes).
Explanation:
“Café” has an accent on the "e," but it's okay to write "cafe" if you can't type the accent. Also, "nearby" should come after “a café.” -
Original:
At that time, it showered heavily all of a sudden.
Corrected:
At that time, it suddenly started to rain heavily.
Explanation:
“Showered” is not wrong, but native speakers usually say “started to rain” or “rained heavily.” “Suddenly” fits better before “started.” -
Original:
We were worried because we didn't take our umbrellas.
Corrected:
We were worried because we hadn’t brought our umbrellas.
Explanation:
“Hadn’t brought” is better here because it's something that happened before the moment of worry. It shows the timing more clearly. -
Original:
But the rain stopped while we finished our meals, like a miracle!
Corrected:
But the rain stopped while we were finishing our meals—like a miracle!
Explanation:
“While we were finishing” sounds more natural for something happening at the same time. The dash (—) adds emotion to "like a miracle!"
Final Edited Text
Today, the result of the secondary GED was announced. I passed, and, well, I was happy. In the afternoon, my mom and I visited the Seoul Metropolitan Office of Education, and I got my certificate of acceptance. Then we went to a nearby cafe (it’s hard to type the accent sometimes). I ordered a jambon beurre sandwich and iced tea. At that time, it suddenly started to rain heavily. We were worried because we hadn’t brought our umbrellas. But the rain stopped while we were finishing our meals - like a miracle!
Message: Congratulations on passing the GED! I'm sure you studied hard, and you did it - great job! Enjoy your success and keep moving forward!
