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Yesterday, I went to fencing. It was sweltering hot, so I was sweating a lot. Today I decided to stay cool at home with my air conditioner and fans.

My English tutor wouldn't know that our English class was 20 minutes longer since today. I should have told her about it, but I couldn't because I needed to check. I also couldn't say it in English.

Yesterday, I went to fencing. It was sweltering hot, so I was sweating a lot. Today I decided to stay cool at home with my air conditioner and fans.

My English tutor wouldn't know that our English class was 20 minutes longer since today. I should have told her about it, but I couldn't because I needed to check. I also couldn't say it in English.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: Yesterday, I went to fencing.
    Corrected: Yesterday, I went to my fencing class.
    Explanation: “Fencing” is an activity, but it's clearer and more natural to say "fencing class" when referring to a session or lesson.

  2. Original: It was sweltering hot, so I was sweating a lot.
    Corrected:(No change needed)
    Explanation: This sentence is grammatically correct and clearly conveys the idea.

  3. Original: Today I decided to stay cool at home with my air conditioner and fans.
    Corrected:(No change needed)
    Explanation: This sentence is also correct and clear.

  4. Original: My English tutor wouldn't know that our English class was 20 minutes longer since today.
    Corrected: My English tutor didn’t know that our English class was 20 minutes longer starting today.
    Explanation: “Wouldn’t know” is awkward here—use past tense “didn’t know.” Also, “since today” should be “starting today” for natural phrasing.

  5. Original: I should have told her about it, but I couldn't because I needed to check.
    Corrected:(No change needed)
    Explanation: This sentence is mostly fine, though you could also say “I wasn’t sure” for smoother wording.

  6. Original: I also couldn't say it in English.
    Corrected:(No change needed)
    Explanation: This sentence is simple and correct.


Final Edited Version

Yesterday, I went to my fencing class. It was sweltering hot, so I was sweating a lot. Today, I decided to stay cool at home with my air conditioner and fans.

My English tutor didn’t know that our English class was 20 minutes longer starting today. I should have told her about it, but I couldn't because I needed to check. I also couldn't say it in English.


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