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My son still have got red eyes. He was on antibiotic eyedrop. He has allergic hy affected air quality. If we have dust, dry, animal's fur then he turn out red eyes or swollen of eyes. Even though it has problems , he usually wear a dream lenses. The doctor said no mtter what allegic he has it is okay. To doing is more effect. Dream lenses is stopping to get down eye sight. If he turn out symptoms of eyes, he just putting on eyedrop. Untill tomorrow take a rest then he would be fine.

My son still have got red eyes. He was on antibiotic eyedrop. He has allergic hy affected air quality. If we have dust, dry, animal's fur then he turn out red eyes or swollen of eyes. Even though it has problems , he usually wear a dream lenses. The doctor said no mtter what allegic he has it is okay. To doing is more effect. Dream lenses is stopping to get down eye sight. If he turn out symptoms of eyes, he just putting on eyedrop. Untill tomorrow take a rest then he would be fine.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: My son still have got red eyes.
    Corrected: My son still has red eyes.
    Explanation: "My son" is singular, so "has" should be used instead of "have got." Also, "got" is unnecessary here.

  2. Original: He was on antibiotic eyedrop.
    Corrected: He was using antibiotic eye drops.
    Explanation: "Eyedrop" should be plural ("eye drops") since it's typically used in multiple doses. "On" is unnatural here; "using" is more appropriate.

  3. Original: He has allergic hy affected air quality.
    Corrected: He has allergies that are affected by air quality.
    Explanation: "Allergic" is an adjective, but a noun ("allergies") is needed here. "Hy" seems to be a typo. The sentence was restructured for clarity.

  4. Original: If we have dust, dry, animal's fur then he turn out red eyes or swollen of eyes.
    Corrected: If there is dust, dry air, or animal fur, his eyes turn red or become swollen.
    Explanation: "We have" should be "there is." "Dry" should be "dry air." "Animal's fur" should be "animal fur." "Turn out" is incorrect; "his eyes turn red" is more natural. "Swollen of eyes" should be "become swollen."

  5. Original: Even though it has problems, he usually wear a dream lenses.
    Corrected: Even though he has eye problems, he usually wears dream lenses.
    Explanation: "It has problems" should be "he has eye problems" for clarity. "Wear" should be "wears" (singular subject). "A dream lenses" should be "dream lenses" (plural).

  6. Original: The doctor said no mtter what allegic he has it is okay.
    Corrected: The doctor said no matter what allergies he has, it is okay.
    Explanation: "No mtter" should be "no matter." "Allegic" should be "allergies" (noun form). A comma was added for readability.

  7. Original: To doing is more effect.
    Corrected: Wearing them is more effective.
    Explanation: "To doing" is incorrect; "Wearing them" makes the sentence clearer. "Effect" should be "effective" (adjective).

  8. Original: Dream lenses is stopping to get down eye sight.
    Corrected: Dream lenses help prevent eyesight from worsening.
    Explanation: "Is stopping" should be "help prevent" for natural phrasing. "To get down eye sight" is awkward; "eyesight from worsening" is clearer.

  9. Original: If he turn out symptoms of eyes, he just putting on eyedrop.
    Corrected: If he shows symptoms, he just puts on eye drops.
    Explanation: "Turn out symptoms of eyes" is incorrect; "shows symptoms" is more natural. "Putting on" should be "puts on." "Eyedrop" should be "eye drops" (plural).

  10. Original: Untill tomorrow take a rest then he would be fine.
    Corrected: He should rest until tomorrow, and then he will be fine.
    Explanation: "Untill" should be "until." "Take a rest" should be "rest." "Then he would be fine" should be "then he will be fine" (future tense).


Final Edited Version:

 

My son still has red eyes. He was using antibiotic eye drops. He has allergies that are affected by air quality. If there is dust, dry air, or animal fur, his eyes turn red or become swollen. Even though he has eye problems, he usually wears dream lenses. The doctor said no matter what allergies he has, it is okay. Wearing them is more effective. Dream lenses help prevent eyesight from worsening. If he shows symptoms, he just puts on eye drops. He should rest until tomorrow, and then he will be fine.


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