I believe that students need physical education classes because students need to have different experience than just seating more than ten hours in school snd learning boring things.On the other hand, some people can say that schools are for studying not exercising. However, when we keep studying without any exercising our brain can be explored by all the boring informations and not be able to learn new things. From this reason I think we need P.E class and P.E class is a most important class and it shouldn’t be missed.
I believe that students need physical education classes because students need to have different experience than just seating more than ten hours in school snd learning boring things.On the other hand, some people can say that schools are for studying not exercising. However, when we keep studying without any exercising our brain can be explored by all the boring informations and not be able to learn new things. From this reason I think we need P.E class and P.E class is a most important class and it shouldn’t be missed.
Corrected Argument:
I believe that students need physical education classes because they should have different experiences than just sitting for more than ten hours in school, learning boring things. On the other hand, some people may argue that schools are for studying, not exercising. However, when we study without exercising, our brains can become overwhelmed with all the boring information, making it harder to learn new things. For this reason, I think P.E. is one of the most important classes and should never be missed.
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Explanation of Corrections:
"seating" → "sitting": "Seating" refers to the act of providing seats, while "sitting" refers to the act of being seated.
"more than ten hours in school" → "sitting for more than ten hours in school": Added "sitting for" to make the sentence clearer.
"some people can say" → "some people may argue": "May argue" sounds more formal and appropriate in this context.
"brain can be explored by all the boring informations" → "our brains can become overwhelmed with all the boring information": "Explored" doesn’t fit here; "overwhelmed" better conveys the idea of being mentally burdened. Also, "informations" is incorrect; "information" is uncountable.
"P.E class is a most important class" → "P.E. is one of the most important classes": Rephrased for clarity and accuracy.
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필리핀 화상영어 주 3회 25분 4주
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Edleth
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Debate Pro Junior 1
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