영작교정
목록
완료

My mom and dad new car

My dad car is granger.My mom car kia ray.
It's very nice.My mom car is small.My dad car is regular car.
I ride ray is nice.I go to the car sente.

Here’s a corrected and improved version of your text:

"My dad's car is a Granger, and my mom's car is a Kia Ray. They are both very nice. My mom's car is small, while my dad's car is a regular-sized car. I like riding in the Ray; it’s nice. I also went to the car center."

 

Here are the corrections and improvements I made:

 

  1. "My dad car" → "My dad's car"

    • Added an apostrophe + "s" to indicate possession.
  2. "My mom car kia ray." → "My mom's car is a Kia Ray."

    • Added an apostrophe + "s" for possession.
    • Added "is a" to make the sentence grammatically correct.
    • Capitalized "Kia Ray" (car model names should be capitalized).
  3. "It's very nice." → "They are both very nice."

    • Changed "It’s" to "They are both" to refer to both cars instead of just one.
  4. "My mom car is small." → "My mom's car is small."

    • Added an apostrophe + "s" for possession.
  5. "My dad car is regular car." → "My dad's car is a regular-sized car."

    • Added an apostrophe + "s" for possession.
    • Added "a" before "regular car" for correct grammar.
    • Changed "regular car" to "regular-sized car" for better clarity.
  6. "I ride ray is nice." → "I like riding in the Ray; it’s nice."

    • Changed "I ride" to "I like riding in" for proper tense and structure.
    • Capitalized "Ray" since it’s a car model.
    • Added a semicolon to connect the thoughts smoothly.
  7. "I go to the car sente." → "I also went to the car center."

    • Changed "go" to "went" to match past tense.
    • Changed "sente" to "center" (assuming you meant a car service center or dealership).
    • Added "also" to improve flow.

수강정보
필리핀 화상영어 주 5회 25분 4주
튜터
K
교재
We Bare Bears (위 베어 베어스)
[주니어] 애니메이션
번호
제목
작성자
튜터
작성일
1999
완료
[14번째 영작 첨삭] It's better to spend money on trips than to put it aside for the future. -(Disagree)
Lucas
Melissa
2021.05.05
1998
완료
[12번째 영작 첨삭] clean the room
Jennypark
Therese"☎
2021.05.05
1997
완료
[11번째 영작 첨삭] workout
Jennypark
Therese"☎
2021.05.05
1996
완료
[10번째 영작 첨삭] money
Jennypark
Therese"☎
2021.05.05
1995
완료
[9번째 영작 첨삭] Manny
Jennypark
Therese"☎
2021.05.05
1994
완료
[17번째 영작 첨삭] My diary
Zoe
Mary
2021.05.04
1993
완료
[13번째 영작 첨삭] Help elementary students with their studies
Lucas
Melissa
2021.05.04
1992
완료
[24번째 영작 첨삭] My friends
Yumin
-
2021.05.03
1991
완료
[12번째 영작 첨삭] The family meal is important
Lucas
Melissa
2021.05.03
1990
완료
[7번째 영작 첨삭] Think about a wild animal that you have seen or would like to see some day.
Leo
-
2021.05.03
1989
완료
[17번째 영작 첨삭] My grandmother's new house
Carol
Charm
2021.05.02
1988
완료
[11번째 영작 첨삭] Should we aware events that occur in other countries?
Lucas
Melissa
2021.05.02
1987
완료
[10번째 영작 첨삭] Is it acceptable to neglect environmental concern to promote economic growth?
Lucas
Melissa
2021.05.02
1986
완료
[9번째 영작 첨삭] Start right away or wait until we get the good idea?
Lucas
Melissa
2021.05.01
1985
완료
[8번째 영작 첨삭] Technology made children less creative.
Lucas
Melissa
2021.05.01
1984
완료
[23번째 영작 첨삭] Why like Coco the movie
Yumin
-
2021.04.30
1983
완료
[22번째 영작 첨삭] About my homework.
Hangyeol Lee (Christian)
Mary
2021.04.30
1982
완료
[7번째 영작 첨삭] The majority of business owners are driven solely by the pursuit of wealth- (disagree)
Lucas
Melissa
2021.04.30
1981
완료
[22번째 영작 첨삭] My friend interview
Yumin
-
2021.04.28
1980
완료
[6번째 영작 첨삭] The elderly need exercise more than young people do.
Lucas
Melissa
2021.04.28

초대한 친구가 수업을 등록하면
무료 수업 1회를 드려요!

무료 수업 1회
초대한 친구가 회원 가입 및 수강권 결제 후 수업을 등록하면
두 사람 모두 무료 수업 1회 수강권을 받아요!
Step 01. 조이영어로 친구를 초대해 보세요!
https://joy05.co.kr
Step 02. 인증하기
초대한 친구가 수업 등록을 완료하면, 고객센터로 수업을 등록한 친구의 '아이디' 또는 '이름 + 휴대폰 번호 뒷자리'를 남겨주세요!
*자녀 혹은 학부모 이름으로 가입하신 경우, 실제 회원가입하신 수강생 이름으로 적어주세요!
Ex. 친구 아이디: joy5205 / 친구 이름: 김조이, 9876
Step 03. 혜택받기
고객센터를 통해 인증하신 내용이 확인되면, 혜택을 적용해드립니다!

Zoom 화상수업 가이드

1. Zoom 설치하기
아래 링크에 접속하여 Zoom 프로그램을 설치합니다.
2. 수강실 입장하기
1) 조이영어 홈페이지 로그인 후 강의실에서 [수강실 입장] 버튼을 클릭해주세요.
2) 버튼을 누르고 Zoom 프로그램 열기 허용 → 컴퓨터 오디오로 참가를 누르면 튜터와 연결됩니다.
3. Zoom 이용에 다른 문의사항이 있으신가요?
조이영어 학습매니저에게 연락주시면 수업에 관련된 문의사항을 친절히 상담해드리겠습니다.
  • 카카오톡 상담 채널 : @조이영어
  • 조이영어 고객센터 : 1899-8695 (운영시간 : 월~금 9:00~17:30)

이용약관

개인정보취급방침