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Hello, I came back from vietnam. My travel is really wonderful. But weather is so hot. I visited vietnam's three cities.
Danang, Hoian and Hue. Danang is one of resort city. And Hoian is a port city. Hue is a historical city. First week of May is Korea's holiday. So as expected, there are a lot of Korean in Vietnam. It seems like Korea.

This is my first trip with tour guide. Our team members are 13 people. Except me, my mom and mom's friends, the rest of them are compartively so old. alomost them are grandmother or grandfather.
I want to stay long time outside to tour, but they hate to stay long time outside. So I also have no choice. Because we must have to move together. I think this is negative part in package tour.

And in tour last day, We should have to visit shopping mall that related with our tourguide or travel agency.So price really expensive and sellers are also koreans. I was dsappointed. But I said to tour guide, "I want to visit a local market".So he gave me short time for shopping in local market. Finally i satisfied with this travel.

This trip is first time wit my mom, and also first time with tourguide.
I think, I still more like free traveling .

Hello, I just came back from Vietnam. My travel is really wonderful, but the weather is so hot. I visited vietnam's three cities.
Danang, Hoian and Hue. Danang is one of the resort in the city, Hoian is a port city and Hue is a historical city. First week of May is Korea's holiday, so as expected there's a lot of Korean in Vietnam and It seems like Korea.

This is my first trip with a tour guide. Our team members are thirteen people except me, my mom, my mom's friends and the rest of them are compartively so old. Almost all of them are grandmother or grandfather.
I want to stay with longer time outside to tour, but they hate to stay outside, so I have no choice because we must move all together at the same time. I think this is a negative part in package tour

For the last day of our tour we should visit shopping mall that is related with our tour guide or travel agency. The prices in the mall was really expensive and the sellers are also koreans. I was disappointed. I asked our tour guide If I can visit Vietnam's local market then he gave me a short time to shop in local market. Finally I'm  satisfied with our trip.

This trip is my first time with my mom, and also with a tour guide.
I think, I still more like free traveling .

 

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