Originally, I wasn't interested in the Avengers, but I watched the movie with my mom and dad.
There are two reason, why I like Iron Man.
First, who I know Avengers member is Iron Man, Torr, and spider-man.
Second, I think Iron Man is a great man in the Avengers.
It is not?
Originally, I wasn't interested in The Avengers movie, but I still watched it with my mom and dad. After watching the movie, Iron Man became my favorite Avengers character. There are two reasons why I like Iron Man. First, the characters I know are just Iron Man, Thor and Spiderman. Second, I think Iron Man is a great man in The Avengers movie. Isn't he?
Hello, Min!
Your writing skills are improving, however there are some changes/corrections I made on your composition. First, you have to arrange the sequence of sentences when you write. Using sequence words (first and second) is actually a good idea, you are able to make you writing more synchronized, however you still have to arrange the sentences in your composistion. Also, you have to be careful of your grammar. You have to know the correct usage of verbs in your sentences. You can do it! Keep it up!
Kath :)
