After my English class, I asked my mom when I was a child, I would fly a kite. She told me, "Of course, sometimes you flew it at the Han River, Hwaseong Fortress in Suwon, or many other parks." Only then did my memories come to mind vaguely. Tomorrow, I'm going to Mok-dong, where I used to attend English class, because I have a sewing class. I'll make pants for my dad as a birthday gift. It's a secret to him.
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Here are the corrections:
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Original:
"After my English class, I asked my mom when I was a child, I would fly a kite."
Corrected:
"After my English class, I asked my mom if I used to fly a kite when I was a child."
Explanation:
The sentence was confusing because it sounded like two sentences mixed up. When you ask a question, you use "if" (not "when") and "used to" is better than "would" when talking about old habits in this kind of sentence.
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Original:
"She told me, 'Of course, sometimes you flew it at the Han River, Hwaseong Fortress in Suwon, or many other parks.'"
Corrected:
"She told me, 'Of course. Sometimes you flew it at the Han River, Hwaseong Fortress in Suwon, or many other parks.'"
Explanation:
We change the comma to a period because "Of course" is a complete sentence on its own. That makes it easier to understand.
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Original:
"Only then did my memories come to mind vaguely."
Corrected:
"Only then did some vague memories come to mind."
Explanation:
We say "some vague memories" because it sounds more natural in English. It's clearer to say what kind of memories they are.
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Original:
"Tomorrow, I'm going to Mok-dong, where I used to attend English class, because I have a sewing class."
Corrected:
✅ This sentence is correct!
Explanation:
The sentence is clear and grammatically correct. No change needed.
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Original:
"I'll make pants for my dad as a birthday gift."
Corrected:
✅ This sentence is also correct!
Explanation:
It's a good, simple sentence. Nothing to fix.
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Original:
"It's a secret to him."
Corrected:
"It's a secret from him."
Explanation:
We say "a secret from someone" when that person doesn’t know about it. "To him" doesn’t make sense in this case.
Final Edited Text
After my English class, I asked my mom if I used to fly a kite when I was a child. She told me, "Of course. Sometimes you flew it at the Han River, Hwaseong Fortress in Suwon, or many other parks." Only then did some vague memories come to mind. Tomorrow, I'm going to Mok-dong, where I used to attend English class, because I have a sewing class. I'll make pants for my dad as a birthday gift. It's a secret from him.
