For lunch my mom made me Filipino chicken adobo today. So I told my tutor that I had the chicken adobo for the first time and that was really delicious. My mom watched it on YouTube, Nicole Hong (23,9.30), by pure chance, and she even knew to put in Sprite soda because she saw lots of other videos when she decided to make it. She cooked to use the chicken tenderloin and added some salt, garlic, whole pepper, bay leaves, honey, and vinegar. I want to try to taste pork and beef adobo later.
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Here are the corrections:
Original: For lunch my mom made me Filipino chicken adobo today.
Corrected: Today, my mom made me Filipino chicken adobo for lunch.
Explanation: "Today" is placed at the beginning for smoother flow. The time ("for lunch") comes after the action.
Original: So I told my tutor that I had the chicken adobo for the first time and that was really delicious.
Corrected: I told my tutor that I had chicken adobo for the first time, and it was really delicious.
Explanation: We use "it" instead of "that" to refer to the dish. Also, "and" connects the two ideas better.
Original: My mom watched it on YouTube, Nicole Hong (23,9.30), by pure chance, and she even knew to put in Sprite soda because she saw lots of other videos when she decided to make it.
Corrected: My mom watched a video by Nicole Hong on YouTube by chance, and she learned to add Sprite soda because she had seen many other videos before making it.
Explanation: Use “a video by Nicole Hong” instead of "it" for clarity. "Learned to add" is clearer than “knew to put in.”
Original: She cooked to use the chicken tenderloin and added some salt, garlic, whole pepper, bay leaves, honey, and vinegar.
Corrected: She used chicken tenderloin and added salt, garlic, whole pepper, bay leaves, honey, and vinegar.
Explanation: “Cooked to use” is awkward. We simplify to “used chicken tenderloin.”
Original: I want to try to taste pork and beef adobo later.
Corrected: I want to try pork and beef adobo next time.
Explanation: “Try to taste” is wordy. “Try” already means to taste something new.
Final Edited Version
Today, my mom made me Filipino chicken adobo for lunch. I told my tutor that I had chicken adobo for the first time, and it was really delicious. My mom watched a video by Nicole Hong on YouTube by chance, and she learned to add Sprite soda because she had seen many other videos before making it. She used chicken tenderloin and added salt, garlic, whole pepper, bay leaves, honey, and vinegar. I want to try pork and beef adobo next time.
Hi Min! Thank you for trying adobo! I'm so glad you liked it - it's a special and delicious Filipino dish! I hope you can try more yummy Filipino dishes in the future too!
