The owner of the cafe where we entered by chance, she gave us permission first to use a study room; that was lucky. After studying, I started to read the book, but there were too many letters, so it was difficult to read. I was feeling muzzy and sleepy once I drank a strawberry latte that was so sweet.
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Here are the corrections:
1. Original:
The owner of the cafe where we entered by chance, she gave us permission first to use a study room; that was lucky.
Corrected:
The owner of the café we entered by chance gave us permission to use a study room first — that was lucky.
Explanation:
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“The owner … she gave” → This is a redundancy (the subject is repeated). Use either “The owner … gave” or “She gave.”
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“First to use a study room” → Better as “to use a study room first” (natural word order).
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Use an em dash or period before “that was lucky” for clarity.
2. Original:
After studying, I started to read the book, but there were too many letters, so it was difficult to read.
Corrected:
After studying, I started reading a book, but there was too much text, so it was difficult to read.
Explanation:
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“Started to read the book” → More natural as “started reading a book.”
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“Too many letters” → In English, we usually say “too much text” or “too many words” instead of “letters” unless you’re talking about handwritten or individual characters.
3. Original:
I was feeling muzzy and sleepy once I drank a strawberry latte that was so sweet.
Corrected:
I felt drowsy and sleepy after drinking a very sweet strawberry latte.
Explanation:
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“Was feeling” → Simple past “felt” is more concise here.
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“Muzzy” is uncommon in everyday English; “drowsy” is clearer.
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“Once I drank” → Better as “after drinking.”
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“That was so sweet” → Better integrated as “a very sweet strawberry latte.”
Final Edited Version:
The owner of the café we entered by chance gave us permission to use a study room first - that was lucky. After studying, I started reading a book, but there was too much text, so it was difficult to read. I felt drowsy and sleepy after drinking a very sweet strawberry latte.
