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It's getting better my condition. I chatted friend with coffee then I felt good. It stared that since we visited grave in mountain when after having stared my son and my husband, fanally I got a allergic symptoms. they was getting better I stared runny nose and had inflammation in my eyes .as soon as it gets better in my left eye, suddenly it stared swollen in right eye again. the more work out, the more care for diet but spring makes me weakly. Now I feel refreshed.it is suffer months for my family.

It's getting better my condition. I chatted friend with coffee then I felt good. It stared that since we visited grave in mountain when after having stared my son and my husband, fanally I got a allergic symptoms. they was getting better I stared runny nose and had inflammation in my eyes .as soon as it gets better in my left eye, suddenly it stared swollen in right eye again. the more work out, the more care for diet but spring makes me weakly. Now I feel refreshed.it is suffer months for my family. =====================================================================================================================================================

Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: It's getting better my condition.
    Corrected: My condition is getting better.
    Explanation: In English, the subject comes first. "My condition" is the subject, followed by the verb phrase "is getting better."

  2. Original: I chatted friend with coffee then I felt good.
    Corrected: I chatted with a friend over coffee, and then I felt good.
    Explanation: "Chatted with a friend" is the correct phrase. "Over coffee" describes the setting. "And then" adds a natural sequence.

  3. Original: It stared that since we visited grave in mountain when after having stared my son and my husband, fanally I got a allergic symptoms.
    Corrected: It started after we visited a grave in the mountains, after my son and husband stared at it. Finally, I got allergic symptoms.
    Explanation:

    • "Stared" should be "started" (wrong verb).

    • Articles ("a grave", "the mountains", "allergic symptoms") are added.

    • “Got a allergic” → “got allergic” or “got an allergic reaction” (correct article use).

    • Clarified the meaning with simpler structure.

  4. Original: they was getting better I stared runny nose and had inflammation in my eyes
    Corrected: They were getting better, but then I started having a runny nose and inflammation in my eyes.
    Explanation:

    • "They was" → "They were" (subject-verb agreement).

    • "Stared" → "started" (wrong word).

    • "Runny nose" needs an article and a verb to complete the idea.

  5. Original: as soon as it gets better in my left eye, suddenly it stared swollen in right eye again.
    Corrected: As soon as my left eye got better, my right eye suddenly became swollen again.
    Explanation: Past tense needed for consistency. “Stared” should be “became swollen.” Added subject clarity.

  6. Original: the more work out, the more care for diet but spring makes me weakly.
    Corrected: The more I work out and watch my diet, the weaker I feel in spring.
    Explanation: "Work out" needs a subject, “watch” or “take care of” is better than "care for diet," and "weakly" (an adverb) should be "weak" (an adjective).

  7. Original: Now I feel refreshed.it is suffer months for my family.
    Corrected: Now I feel refreshed. These have been difficult months for my family.
    Explanation: “Suffer months” is unnatural. “Difficult months” conveys the meaning better.


Final Edited Text:

My condition is getting better. I chatted with a friend over coffee, and then I felt good. It started after we visited a grave in the mountains, after my son and husband stared at it. Finally, I developed allergic symptoms. They were getting better, but then I started having a runny nose and inflammation in my eyes. As soon as my left eye got better, my right eye suddenly became swollen again. The more I work out and watch my diet, the weaker I feel in spring. Now I feel refreshed. These have been difficult months for my family.


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