Oct.13.2023 Dairy

Yesterday I went to school.
Our school did multiple culturs projects.
Our class was Indo.
There was many country. First a team explain to traveler our Indo.
When B team came we when to another calss.
Then went to ate lunch.
when we ate all snack party.
I saw movie named Elemental.
It was a perfect day ever.
When I went school!!

Yesterday, I went to school.
Our school did multiple cultural projects.
Our class was Indo.
There was were many countries. First, a team explained to travelers our Indo.
When B team came we went to another calss.
Then went to ate lunch.
When we ate all snack party,
I saw a movie named Elemental.
It was a perfect day ever.
When I went to school!

 

Note: Good day, Jian. I corrected your composition. You did well on this one. However, you have to learn how and when to use a comma. You can observe in my correction how and when to use it. The blue ones are the words that I added, while the green ones are the ones I corrected.