My mom and I went to the old general shop, soon to be out of business, so we got lots of things we needed really cheap. A few weeks ago, she bought three blue transparent glass cups there; it was pretty. We stopped by the place where we lived before, and she took some pictures of me with the house in the background. And we went to the greengrocer and bought three heads of napa cabbage for kimchi. She had no choice but to cancel the original plan to buy more because those were very heavy.
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Here are the corrections:
1. My mom and I went to the old general shop, soon to be out of business, so we got lots of things we needed really cheap.
Corrected: My mom and I went to an old general store that was soon going out of business, so we got a lot of things we needed at a really cheap price.
Explanation:
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"General shop" → "general store" is the more natural phrase in English.
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"Soon to be out of business" → revised for smoother flow: “that was soon going out of business.”
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"Really cheap" → added "at a" and "price" to clarify the structure.
2. A few weeks ago, she bought three blue transparent glass cups there; it was pretty.
Corrected: A few weeks ago, she bought three transparent blue glass cups there; they were pretty.
Explanation:
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“Transparent blue glass cups” is the more natural word order.
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“It was pretty” → changed to "they were pretty" to match the plural subject "cups."
3. We stopped by the place where we lived before, and she took some pictures of me with the house in the background.
Corrected: ✅ No major corrections needed; the sentence is grammatically correct and clear.
Minor edit (optional): "...stopped by our old neighborhood..." or "...our former home..." (for smoother style, not correctness).
4. And we went to the greengrocer and bought three heads of napa cabbage for kimchi.
Corrected: Then we went to the greengrocer and bought three heads of napa cabbage to make kimchi.
Explanation:
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"And" → "Then" is a smoother transition.
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“For kimchi” → “to make kimchi” is clearer in purpose.
5. She had no choice but to cancel the original plan to buy more because those were very heavy.
Corrected: She had no choice but to cancel her original plan to buy more because they were very heavy.
Explanation:
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"The original plan" → "her original plan" for clarity.
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"Those" → "they" is a more natural pronoun for "cabbages."
Final Edited Version:
My mom and I went to an old general store that was soon going out of business, so we got a lot of things we needed at a really cheap price. A few weeks ago, she bought three transparent blue glass cups there; they were pretty. We stopped by the place where we lived before, and she took some pictures of me with the house in the background. Then we went to the greengrocer and bought three heads of napa cabbage to make kimchi. She had no choice but to cancel her original plan to buy more because they were very heavy.
