Oct 4, 2023 Diary

Today I went to 'Zoolung Zoolung' with my mother and baby brother.
First, I give food to Meerkats, Guineapigs, Pelicans, birds and rabbits and so on.
Middle of the time I saw a zookeeper giving the Penguins some fish.
Then, I went to the kids cafe upstairs.
When I ride slide I was hungry, so I ate a pork cutlet with my baby brother.
My baby brother want juice. So 1 hour latter we go to home.
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Today, I went to 'Zoolung Zoolung' with my mother and baby brother.
First, I give gave food to meerkats, guinea pigs, pelicans, birds, and rabbits, and so on.
Middle of the time, I saw a zookeeper giving the penguins some fish.
Then, I went to the kids cafe upstairs.
When I rode slide I was hungry, so I ate a pork cutlet with my baby brother.
My baby brother wanted juice. So one hour latter, we go to went back home.
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Note: Good day, Jian. I corrected your composition. You did well on this one. However, you have to learn how and when to use a comma. You can observe in my correction how and when to use it. The blue ones are the words that I added, while the green ones are the ones I corrected.