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We moved in area nearby mu husband 's work. So we got to more time than before. When we lived fat form at work he had to go for work earlier and go off later, to avoid rushhour. So today my husband had a some availble time in the morning fortunately. So we get my son to home we spent our time. In good mood cafe , we talked our worry , future and so on. Without my son, I seem to have to time like that.

We moved in area nearby mu husband 's work. So we got to more time than before. When we lived fat form at work he had to go for work earlier and go off later, to avoid rushhour. So today my husband had a some availble time in the morning fortunately. So we get my son to home we spent our time. In good mood cafe , we talked our worry , future and so on. Without my son, I seem to have to time like that.
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Here are the corrections:
 

We moved in area nearby mu husband 's work.
❌ Issue: “in area nearby” → “to an area near”; typo “mu” → “my”
✔ Corrected: We moved to an area near my husband’s workplace.


So we got to more time than before.
❌ Issue: “got to more time” → “have more time”
✔ Corrected: So we have more time together than before.


When we lived fat form at work he had to go for work earlier and go off later, to avoid rushhour.
❌ Issue: “fat form at work” → “far from work”; “go for work” → “go to work”; “go off” → “get off”; “rushhour” → “rush hour”
✔ Corrected: When we lived far from his work, he had to leave earlier and get off later to avoid rush hour.


So today my husband had a some availble time in the morning fortunately.
❌ Issue: “a some” is incorrect; “availble” → “available”; word order
✔ Corrected: Fortunately, my husband had some free time this morning.


So we get my son to home we spent our time.
❌ Issue: “get my son to home” → “brought our son home”; sentence needs to be clearer.
✔ Corrected: So after bringing our son home, we spent time together.


In good mood cafe , we talked our worry , future and so on.
❌ Issue: “In good mood cafe” → “At a cozy cafe”; “talked our worry” → “talked about our worries”
✔ Corrected: At a cozy cafe, we talked about our worries, our future, and more.


Without my son, I seem to have to time like that.
❌ Issue: “have to time” → “have little time”; rephrase for clarity.
✔ Corrected: Without our son around, it seems we rarely get time like this.



Final Edited Version:

We recently moved to an area near my husband’s workplace, so we have more time together than before. When we lived far from his work, he had to leave earlier and get off later to avoid rush hour. Fortunately, my husband had some free time this morning. So after bringing our son home, we spent some time together. At a cozy cafe, we talked about our worries, our future, and more. Without our son around, it seems we rarely get moments like that.


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