He has been joining the football club. They have a match with another team in once an month. After playing I felt frustrated. Because it seems my son fear of physical contact with another one. If one he has strong power come up on the him, he lost the ball of his chance. I think he have to more eat a lot and have to play rough even though he get the Paul.he seems need a rough play using his body.he is good at cover defense and pass to guys . but sometime I want to hit the ball having greedy.
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Here are the corrections:
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Original: He has been joining the football club.
Corrected: He has joined the football club.
Explanation: “Has been joining” is awkward for a completed action. “Has joined” fits better to show he is now a member. -
Original: They have a match with another team in once an month.
Corrected: They have a match with another team once a month.
Explanation: "In once an month" is incorrect. The correct phrase is "once a month." -
Original: After playing I felt frustrated.
Corrected: I felt frustrated after watching him play.
Explanation: This adds clarity — who is playing, and who is feeling frustrated. -
Original: Because it seems my son fear of physical contact with another one.
Corrected: Because it seems my son is afraid of physical contact with others.
Explanation: “Fear” should be “is afraid of,” and “another one” is better as “others.” -
Original: If one he has strong power come up on the him, he lost the ball of his chance.
Corrected: If a strong opponent challenges him, he loses the ball easily.
Explanation: Simplified for clarity and grammar. "Come up on the him" is incorrect and unclear. -
Original: I think he have to more eat a lot and have to play rough even though he get the Paul.
Corrected: I think he needs to eat more and play more aggressively, even if he gets a foul.
Explanation: "He have to more eat" is grammatically wrong. "Get the Paul" is likely a typo of "foul." -
Original: He seems need a rough play using his body.
Corrected: He seems to need to play more physically.
Explanation: Cleaned up grammar — “seems need” → “seems to need to.” -
Original: He is good at cover defense and pass to guys.
Corrected: He is good at covering defense and passing to his teammates.
Explanation: Verb forms corrected, and “guys” changed to “teammates” for clarity. -
Original: But sometime I want to hit the ball having greedy.
Corrected: But sometimes I wish he would go for the ball more greedily.
Explanation: “Having greedy” is incorrect. Rephrased for naturalness.
Final Edited Version
He has joined the football club. They have a match with another team once a month. I felt frustrated after watching him play because it seems my son is afraid of physical contact with others. If a strong opponent challenges him, he loses the ball easily. I think he needs to eat more and play more aggressively, even if he gets a foul. He seems to need to play more physically. He is good at covering defense and passing to his teammates, but sometimes I wish he would go for the ball more greedily.
