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My son is sensitive someside.When He didn't correct anwser, didn't do something He's expected.It's my genetic. Some elder said he is only kid. I used to often tantrum and cry at mom. I got scolding from mom and I got a pushment. Getting older I turned sensitive to good side. I still I didn't solve a problem and I didn't flow task I haven't expect, I used to get annoyed.I think give a hard time myself.When I see my son look like my childhood. I always tell him you are nice boy. clam down.

My son is sensitive someside.When He didn't correct anwser, didn't do something He's expected.It's my genetic. Some elder said he is only kid. I used to often tantrum and cry at mom. I got scolding from mom and I got a pushment. Getting older I turned sensitive to good side. I still I didn't solve a problem and I didn't flow task I haven't expect, I used to get annoyed.I think give a hard time myself.When I see my son look like my childhood. I always tell him you are nice boy. clam down.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: My son is sensitive someside.
    Corrected: My son is sensitive in some ways.
    Error: "Someside" is incorrect; "in some ways" is the correct phrase.

  2. Original: When He didn't correct anwser, didn't do something He's expected.
    Corrected: When he didn’t get the correct answer or didn’t do something as expected.
    Error: "He" should be lowercase unless it's the start of a sentence. "Didn't correct answer" should be "didn’t get the correct answer." "He's expected" is incorrect; it should be "as expected."

  3. Original: It's my genetic.
    Corrected: It’s genetic.
    Error: "My genetic" is incorrect; "genetic" is an adjective, so just "It’s genetic" is the correct phrasing.

  4. Original: Some elder said he is only kid.
    Corrected: Some elders say he is an only child.
    Error: "Some elder" should be "some elders" (plural). "Only kid" should be "only child" (common phrase). "Said" should be "say" for a general statement.

  5. Original: I used to often tantrum and cry at mom.
    Corrected: I used to throw tantrums and cry to my mom often.
    Error: "Tantrum" is a noun and should be "throw tantrums." "Cry at mom" should be "cry to my mom." "Often" is placed at the end for natural flow.

  6. Original: I got scolding from mom and I got a pushment.
    Corrected: I got scolded by my mom and received punishment.
    Error: "Got scolding" should be "got scolded." "Pushment" is incorrect; it should be "punishment." "From mom" should be "by my mom" for correct preposition use.

  7. Original: Getting older I turned sensitive to good side.
    Corrected: As I got older, I became sensitive in a good way.
    Error: "Getting older" should be "As I got older." "Turned sensitive" should be "became sensitive." "To good side" should be "in a good way."

  8. Original: I still I didn't solve a problem and I didn't flow task I haven't expect, I used to get annoyed.
    Corrected: I still get annoyed when I can’t solve a problem or when things don’t go as expected.
    Error: "I still I didn’t" is redundant; "I still" is correct. "Didn't solve" should match tense with "get annoyed." "Flow task" is unclear; "when things don’t go as expected" is more natural.

  9. Original: I think give a hard time myself.
    Corrected: I think I am too hard on myself.
    Error: "Give a hard time myself" is incorrect; "I am too hard on myself" is the correct phrase.

  10. Original: When I see my son look like my childhood.
    Corrected: When I see my son, he reminds me of my childhood.
    Error: "Look like my childhood" is incorrect; "he reminds me of my childhood" is a more natural expression.

  11. Original: I always tell him you are nice boy. clam down.
    Corrected: I always tell him, "You are a nice boy. Calm down."
    Error: "You are nice boy" should be "You are a nice boy." "Clam down" is a typo; it should be "Calm down." Direct speech should be in quotation marks.


Final Edited Text:

My son is sensitive in some ways. When he doesn’t get the correct answer or doesn’t do something as expected, he gets frustrated. I believe it’s genetic. Some elders say he is an only child, but I see myself in him.

I used to throw tantrums and cry to my mom often. I got scolded by my mom and received punishment. As I got older, I became sensitive in a good way. However, I still get annoyed when I can’t solve a problem or when things don’t go as expected. I think I am too hard on myself sometimes.

 

When I see my son, he reminds me of my childhood. I always tell him, "You are a nice boy. Calm down."


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