I think money is most important and here's why.
Fiirst, money makes our life comfortable. For example, when we earn a lot of money, we will be able to do anything we want and that will help us be happy.
Secondly, our son and daughters can live well. For example, when I got $1 million by working, and die, my son and daughter will live happily by these money.
Fiirst, money makes our life comfortable. For example, when we earn a lot of money, we will be able to do anything we want and that will help us be happy.
Secondly, our son and daughters can live well. For example, when I got $1 million by working, and die, my son and daughter will live happily by these money.
I think money is most important and here's why.
Fiirst, money makes our life comfortable. For example, when we earn a lot of money, we will be able to do anything we want and that will help us be happy.
Secondly, our son and daughters can live well. For example, when I got $1 million by working, and die, my son and daughter will live happily by these money.
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CORRECTION:
I think money is the most important thing, and here's why.
First, money makes our lives comfortable. For example, when we earn a lot of money, we can do anything we want, and that contributes to our happiness.
Secondly, our sons and daughters can live well. For example, if I earn $1 million through work and then pass away, my children will be able to live comfortably using that money.
Lastly, some people believe that choosing a job we love will make us happy, but that's not necessarily true. If we choose a job we want but fail, we won’t be stressed by the job itself. Instead, we’ll feel the pressure of financial burdens, like a mortgage or other debts.
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Explanation of mistakes:
"Fiirst" → Corrected to "First" (spelling error).
"money makes our life comfortable" → Changed to "money makes our lives comfortable" to match plural usage (referring to both the speaker's life and others' lives).
"our son and daughters" → Corrected to "our sons and daughters" for proper plural form.
"when I got $1 million by working, and die" → Revised to "if I earn $1 million through work and then pass away" for clarity and proper verb tense.
"these money" → Corrected to "that money" for grammatical accuracy. "Money" is uncountable, so "these" is incorrect here.
"we will not be stressed of the job" → Changed to "we won’t be stressed by the job" for proper phrasing.
"loan for our house" → Adjusted to "mortgage or other debts" for more natural phrasing and to reflect a common financial situation.
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필리핀 전화영어 주 5회 10분 24주
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Edleth
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Debate Pro Junior 2
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