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I've reminded of my past through book's topic. Until got married. I was a violin player in orchestra. We had to performance test in front of constructor, older player. It's like promotion test. If we get a higher score, move in front seat. Or not we move in the very end seat. At in worse case If we don't get a standard score,get fired. I always used to stressed. I felt so happy when I do concert other side I was nervous and felt confident. So after get married I quit a there at first.

I've reminded of my past through book's topic. Until got married. I was a violin player in orchestra. We had to performance test in front of constructor, older player. It's like promotion test. If we get a higher score, move in front seat. Or not we move in the very end seat. At in worse case If we don't get a standard score,get fired. I always used to stressed. I felt so happy when I do concert other side I was nervous and felt confident. So after get married I quit a there at first.

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Here are the corrections:

  1. I've reminded of my past through book's topic.
    Correction: I've been reminded of my past through the book's topic.
    Explanation: "I've reminded" is incorrect; it should be "I've been reminded" (passive voice). "Book's topic" should be "the book's topic" for proper article usage.

  2. Until got married.
    Correction: Until I got married...
    Explanation: A subject is needed in this sentence. "Until" should be followed by "I got married" for clarity.

  3. I was a violin player in orchestra.
    Correction: I was a violin player in an orchestra.
    Explanation: "Orchestra" is a singular countable noun, so it needs the article "an."

  4. We had to performance test in front of constructor, older player.
    Correction: We had to take a performance test in front of the conductor and senior players.
    Explanation: "Performance test" needs the verb "take." "Constructor" is incorrect; it should be "conductor." "Older player" should be pluralized as "senior players" for better fluency.

  5. It's like promotion test.
    Correction: It's like a promotion test.
    Explanation: "Promotion test" needs an article ("a").

  6. If we get a higher score, move in front seat.
    Correction: If we get a higher score, we move to the front seat.
    Explanation: "Move" needs a subject ("we"). "In front seat" should be "to the front seat" for correct preposition use.

  7. Or not we move in the very end seat.
    Correction: Otherwise, we move to the very last seat.
    Explanation: "Or not" is awkward; "Otherwise" is more natural. "In the very end seat" should be "to the very last seat" for better wording.

  8. At in worse case If we don't get a standard score, get fired.
    Correction: In the worst case, if we don't get a standard score, we get fired.
    Explanation: "At in worse case" is incorrect; the proper phrase is "In the worst case." A subject ("we") is needed for "get fired."

  9. I always used to stressed.
    Correction: I was always stressed. OR I always used to be stressed.
    Explanation: "Used to stressed" is incorrect; it should be "used to be stressed" or simply "was always stressed."

  10. I felt so happy when I do concert other side I was nervous and felt confident.
    Correction: I felt so happy when I performed in a concert, but at the same time, I was both nervous and confident.
    Explanation: "Do concert" should be "performed in a concert." "Other side" should be "but at the same time" for clarity. "Felt confident" is fine but needs to be included properly in the sentence structure.

  11. So after get married I quit a there at first.
    Correction: So after getting married, I quit the orchestra.
    Explanation: "After get married" should be "after getting married" (gerund form). "A there" is unnecessary and should be removed. "At first" is vague and unnecessary in this context.


Final Edited Text

I've been reminded of my past through the book's topic. Until I got married, I was a violin player in an orchestra. We had to take a performance test in front of the conductor and senior players. It was like a promotion test—if we got a higher score, we moved to the front seat. Otherwise, we moved to the very last seat.

In the worst case, if we didn't get a standard score, we got fired. I was always stressed. I felt so happy when I performed in a concert, but at the same time, I was both nervous and confident.

So after getting married, I quit the orchestra.

 


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