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I came down to the first floor after my English class, but my mom was nowhere to be seen. I knew she would be on the way and started to read a book at the place where she always waited for me. 30 minutes later, my teacher came down and was surprised that I didn't still leave there. Just then, she got into the building as she panted as soon as he decided to make a call to her.

I came down to the first floor after my English class, but my mom was nowhere to be seen. I knew she would be on the way and started to read a book at the place where she always waited for me. 30 minutes later, my teacher came down and was surprised that I didn't still leave there. Just then, she got into the building as she panted as soon as he decided to make a call to her.

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HERE ARE THE CORRECTIONS:

1. I came down to the first floor after my English class, but my mom was nowhere to be seen.

   • Correction: This sentence is correct. It clearly states what happened.
   • Explanation: You're telling us that after your class, you went downstairs but couldn’t find your mom.

2. I knew she would be on the way and started to read a book at the place where she always waited for me.

   • Correction: "I knew she would be on her way, so I started to read a book in the place where she always waits for me."
   • Explanation: "On the way" sounds better when you say "on her way," and "at" should be changed to "in" because you are inside a specific place.

3. 30 minutes later, my teacher came down and was surprised that I didn't still leave there.

   • Correction: "Thirty minutes later, my teacher came down and was surprised that I still hadn’t left."
   • Explanation: We usually write numbers in words at the beginning of a sentence, and we say "still hadn’t left" instead of "didn't still leave" to show that you were still there.

4. Just then, she got into the building as she panted as soon as he decided to make a call to her.

   • Correction: "Just then, she got into the building and panted as soon as I decided to call her."
   • Explanation: "He" should be "I" because you are the one making the call. Also, we use "and" to connect the two parts of the sentence better.
      

Revised Text:

I came down to the first floor after my English class, but my mom was nowhere to be seen. I knew she would be on her way, so I started to read a book in the place where she always waits for me. Thirty minutes later, my teacher came down and was surprised that I still hadn’t left. Just then, she got into the building and panted as soon as I decided to call her.