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Lastly, some people believe writng a contract helps people paying money back but it is not good way to improve a relationship. When we write a contract, some friends might feel like they don't trust each other. So after paying the money back, the relationship between them will become awkward.

Lastly, some people believe writng a contract helps people paying money back but it is not good way to improve a relationship. When we write a contract, some friends might feel like they don't trust each other. So after paying the money back, the relationship between them will become awkward.

 

CORRECTION: 

I think borrowing money hurts relationships, and here's why.

First, people should manage their money by themselves. For example, when we receive money, we should keep a spending diary so we can manage our money properly.

Secondly, the person who has lent money may feel worried if the borrower doesn't pay it back on time. For instance, when a friend borrows money from me and doesn't pay it back on time, I feel anxious and concerned about getting my money back.

Lastly, some people believe that writing a contract helps ensure repayment, but this is not a good way to improve a relationship. When we write a contract, some friends might feel that they don't trust each other. As a result, after the money is paid back, the relationship between them can become awkward.

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Here’s a list of corrections made, along with brief explanations:

  1. "lended" to "lent": "Lended" is incorrect; the past tense of "lend" is "lent."

  2. "preoperly" to "properly": Corrected the spelling of "properly."

  3. "the person who has lended money" to "the person who has lent money": Changed "lended" to "lent" for correct verb form.

  4. "when a fried borrow money for me" to "when a friend borrows money from me": Corrected "fried" to "friend" and changed "borrow" to "borrows" for subject-verb agreement and proper preposition.

  5. "anxious and worried" to "anxious and concerned": Changed "worried" to "concerned" for variety in word choice.

  6. "writng" to "writing": Corrected the spelling of "writing."

  7. "helps people paying money back" to "helps ensure repayment": Changed the phrase for clarity and conciseness.

  8. "not good way" to "not a good way": Added "a" for grammatical correctness.

  9. "after paying the money back" to "after the money is paid back": Changed the phrasing for better clarity and passive voice.

  10. "the relationship between them will become awkward" to "the relationship between them can become awkward": Changed "will" to "can" to indicate possibility rather than certainty.

These corrections improve grammar, clarity, and overall readability.


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