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Secondly, listing colors are not acceptable with the purpose of fast food restaurants. Fast food restaurants are for eating with joy, not comparing calories and eat healthier meals.
For example, if someone is dieting, then she or he will go to vegetarian restaurants, not fast food restaurants. Why will he or she will go to fast food restaurant if they want healthy meals? I am sure the people who want healthy meals will not come to the fast food restaurant. Lastly, some people think that listing calories help choosing healthier meals, but it is not true.

Secondly, listing colors are not acceptable with the purpose of fast food restaurants. Fast food restaurants are for eating with joy, not comparing calories and eat healthier meals.
For example, if someone is dieting, then she or he will go to vegetarian restaurants, not fast food restaurants. Why will he or she will go to fast food restaurant if they want healthy meals? I am sure the people who want healthy meals will not come to the fast food restaurant. Lastly, some people think that listing calories help choosing healthier meals, but it is not true.

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I think fast food chains should not show calorie counts on their menus. Here’s why: First, showing calorie information could hurt sales. Many people are sensitive to calories and may be shocked by how many calories are in the food. They may choose not to eat anything and leave the restaurant. If this keeps happening, fast food restaurants could lose money and even close down.

Secondly, listing calories is not suitable for fast food restaurants. These places are meant for enjoying food with joy, not for counting calories or focusing on healthier meals.

For example, if someone is dieting, they would likely choose a vegetarian restaurant, not a fast food restaurant. Why would they go to a fast food place if they are looking for healthy meals? I am certain that people seeking healthier options will not visit fast food restaurants.

Lastly, some people believe that listing calories helps in choosing healthier meals, but this is not true. The calorie content of most fast foods is quite similar, so comparing them serves no real purpose.


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