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My son asked that really there is santa, I answered that you think what you want. He 've hearded that Santa is imagine person, not true, Santa is mom from friends. His age seems that disappear innocence of children hood. I said if you hope believe Santa, then you believe it is. He got a Santa present that I had gave. We went to there is big tree in shoppingmall then he wished deep down and we exchanged our Christmas card. I hope My son always keep in mind be pure ,happiness.

My son asked that really there is santa, I answered that you think what you want. He 've hearded that Santa is imagine person, not true, Santa is mom from friends. His age seems that disappear innocence of children hood. I said if you hope believe Santa, then you believe it is. He got a Santa present that I had gave. We went to there is big tree in shoppingmall then he wished deep down and we exchanged our Christmas card. I hope My son always keep in mind be pure ,happiness.
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Original Sentence 1:

My son asked that really there is santa
Explanation: The grammar is awkward, and "Santa" should be capitalized as it's a proper noun.
Edited: My son asked if Santa is real.


Original Sentence 2:

I answered that you think what you want.
Explanation: This phrasing is unclear and unnatural. It can be rephrased for clarity and fluency.
Edited: I answered, "You can believe whatever you want."


Original Sentence 3:

He 've hearded that Santa is imagine person, not true, Santa is mom from friends.
Explanation: "He 've hearded" is incorrect; the correct phrase is "he heard." The word "imagine" should be "imaginary," and the sentence structure needs revision.
Edited: He heard from his friends that Santa is an imaginary person and not real, and that Santa is just their mom.


Original Sentence 4:

His age seems that disappear innocence of children hood.
Explanation: The grammar and word choice are incorrect. It can be rephrased to convey the intended meaning more naturally.
Edited: It seems that as he grows older, the innocence of childhood is fading.


Original Sentence 5:

I said if you hope believe Santa, then you believe it is.
Explanation: The phrasing is awkward and grammatically incorrect.
Edited: I told him, "If you want to believe in Santa, then you should believe."


Original Sentence 6:

He got a Santa present that I had gave.
Explanation: The verb "had gave" is incorrect; it should be "had given."
Edited: He received a Santa present that I had given him.


Original Sentence 7:

We went to there is big tree in shoppingmall then he wished deep down and we exchanged our Christmas card.
Explanation: The sentence is overly wordy, and "there is" should be omitted. "Shoppingmall" needs a space.
Edited: We went to see a big tree at the shopping mall. He made a heartfelt wish, and we exchanged our Christmas cards.


Original Sentence 8:

I hope My son always keep in mind be pure ,happiness.
Explanation: The sentence structure is incorrect, and it needs rephrasing.
Edited: I hope my son always remembers to stay pure and happy.


Final Edited Text:

My son asked if Santa is real. I answered, "You can believe whatever you want." He heard from his friends that Santa is an imaginary person and not real, and that Santa is just their mom. It seems that as he grows older, the innocence of childhood is fading. I told him, "If you want to believe in Santa, then you should believe." He received a Santa present that I had given him. We went to see a big tree at the shopping mall. He made a heartfelt wish, and we exchanged our Christmas cards. I hope my son always remembers to stay pure and happy.


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