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There was a stream nearby and a large swimming pool. The water in the pool was warm, so it was suitable to swim and play even in the cooled off weather. My mom brought her made kimbap to make our break time. We had some snak and took a rest. After swimming, my dad and I enjoyed the spa in the bathtub of our room. We enjoyed BBQ on the terrace for dinner. It was so good. I woke up feeling hot in bed, moved to the cool couch, and could go back to sleep.

There was a stream nearby and a large swimming pool. The water in the pool was warm, so it was suitable to swim and play even in the cooled off weather. My mom brought her made kimbap to make our break time. We had some snak and took a rest. After swimming, my dad and I enjoyed the spa in the bathtub of our room. We enjoyed BBQ on the terrace for dinner. It was so good. I woke up feeling hot in bed, moved to the cool couch, and could go back to sleep.
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Here are the corrections:

1. There was a stream nearby and a large swimming pool.

   • Correction: "There was a stream nearby and a large swimming pool."
   • Explanation: This sentence is already correct. Great job!

2. The water in the pool was warm, so it was suitable to swim and play even in the cooled off weather.

   • Correction: "The water in the pool was warm, so it was suitable for swimming and playing even in the cooler weather."
   • Explanation: We say "suitable for swimming and playing" instead of "suitable to swim and play." Also, "cooled off weather" should be "cooler weather" to make it sound better.

3. My mom brought her made kimbap to make our break time.

   • Correction: "My mom brought her homemade kimbap for our break time."
   • Explanation: We use "homemade" instead of "made" because it means she made it herself. We also say "for our break time" instead of "to make our break time," which sounds more natural.

4. We had some snak and took a rest.

   • Correction: "We had some snacks and took a rest."
   • Explanation: "Snak" should be corrected to "snacks," which is the right word for small foods we eat.

5. After swimming, my dad and I enjoyed the spa in the bathtub of our room.

   • Correction: "After swimming, my dad and I enjoyed the spa in the bathtub in our room."
   • Explanation: It’s better to say "in the bathtub in our room" for clarity.

6. We enjoyed BBQ on the terrace for dinner.

   • Correction: "We enjoyed BBQ on the terrace for dinner."
   • Explanation: This sentence is also correct as it is! Great job!

7. It was so good.

   • Correction: "It was so good!"
   • Explanation: Adding an exclamation mark makes it sound more excited!

8. I woke up feeling hot in bed, moved to the cool couch, and could go back to sleep.

   • Correction: "I woke up feeling hot in bed, moved to the cool couch, and was able to go back to sleep."
   • Explanation: We change "could" to "was able to" for better clarity in this context.

Revised Text:

There was a stream nearby and a large swimming pool. The water in the pool was warm, so it was suitable for swimming and playing even in the cooler weather. My mom brought her homemade kimbap for our break time. We had some snacks and took a rest. After swimming, my dad and I enjoyed the spa in the bathtub in our room. We enjoyed BBQ on the terrace for dinner! It was so good! I woke up feeling hot in bed, moved to the cool couch, and was able to go back to sleep.