At 3:40, I ate chicken in golf course with my family. It was very delicious to me, but my younger sister's this food taste was spicy.
My younger sister said, " Mom, please give water to me quickly! ", so my mom said, " Ok, please wait! 15 minute later, I ate this food anything. This food size is very small. I wanted more this food, but I didn't have more time.
At that time, golf helper said, " Its time for finish! ", so I went golf course.
At 6:00, I finished golf. This was so hard to me, but I thought this work is funny.At 6:30, I arrived my house, and I ate meat.
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At 3:40, I ate chicken in golf course with my family. It was very delicious to me, but my younger sister's this food taste was spicy.
My younger sister said, " Mom, please give water to me quickly! ", so my mom said, " Ok, please wait! 15 minute later, I ate this food anything. This food size is very small. I wanted more this food, but I didn't have more time.
At that time, golf helper said, " Its time for finish! ", so I went golf course.
At 6:00, I finished golf. This was so hard to me, but I thought this work is funny.At 6:30, I arrived my house, and I ate meat.
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At 3:40, I had chicken at the golf course with my family. It was very delicious to me, but my younger sister found it too spicy. She said, "Mom, please give me water quickly!" and my mom replied, "Okay, just wait a moment!"
Fifteen minutes later, I finished my meal. The portion was small, and I wanted more, but we didn’t have enough time. Just then, the golf assistant said, "It’s time to finish!" So, I headed back to the golf course.
At 6:00, I finished playing golf. It was challenging, but I found it fun. By 6:30, I arrived home and had meat for dinner.
