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Squrrel

While I am walking in the morning, I can easily meet squrrels.
They are living in the trees and they come to ground to get some food.
I found that one man gave an amond to a squrrel when I came back to bottom of the hill.
There are some squrrels looked very busy to carry amonds to their places.
They looks like animals in the zoo, but they aren't.
The man feeds every day and he spend much time for that.
I wonder why he began to feed them, however I didn't ask him yet.

While I am walking in the morning, I can easily meet squrrels.
They are living in the trees and they come to ground to get some food.
I found that one man gave an amond to a squrrel when I came back to bottom of the hill.
There are some squrrels looked very busy to carry amonds to their places.
They looks like animals in the zoo, but they aren't.
The man feeds every day and he spend much time for that.
I wonder why he began to feed them, however I didn't ask him yet.

 

CORRECTION: 

While I am walking in the morning, I often see squirrels. They live in the trees and come down to the ground to find food. One day, I saw a man giving an almond to a squirrel when I was coming back down the hill. Some squirrels were busy carrying almonds to their nests. They might seem like zoo animals, but they are not. The man feeds them every day and spends a lot of time doing so. I’m curious about why he started feeding them, but I haven’t asked him yet.

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REPHRASED:

During my morning walks, I frequently encounter squirrels. They make their homes in the trees but come down to search for food. I noticed one day that a man was giving almonds to a squirrel as I was heading back down the hill. Many squirrels appeared busy transporting the almonds to their nests. Although they might resemble zoo animals, they are wild. The man feeds them daily and dedicates a lot of time to it. I’m interested in knowing why he began feeding them, but I haven’t asked him so far.

 


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