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Corrections and Explanations:

1. "I went to an indoor zoo and experienced various things, like feeding and touching the animals."

   • Changed to: "I visited an indoor zoo and had the opportunity to experience various activities, such as feeding and petting the animals."
   • Explanation: "Visited" is a more precise verb, and "had the opportunity to experience" gives the sentence a smoother flow. "Petting" is a more specific term than "touching" when referring to animals.

2. "It was lucky that there were not many people, so I could have it almost to myself."

   • Changed to: "Fortunately, there weren't many people there, so I almost had the place to myself."
   • Explanation: "Fortunately" is a more formal and concise way to express the idea of luck. "The place" is clearer than "it" in this context.

3. "For the first time in my life, I also saw and heard a parrot talking."

   • Changed to: "For the first time in my life, I saw and heard a parrot talking."
   • Explanation: Removed "also" because it's not necessary here and simplifies the sentence.

4. "It was really cute and amazing."

   • Changed to: "It was truly cute and amazing."
   • Explanation: "Truly" is a slightly more formal word choice than "really."

5. "After that, we moved to the hair salon, and then I got my hair cut, and my mom dyed her hair."

   • Changed to: "Afterward, we went to a hair salon where I got a haircut, and my mom had her hair dyed."
   • Explanation: "Afterward" is a smoother transition, and "went to" is more direct. "Got a haircut" and "had her hair dyed" are clearer and more natural phrases.

6. "We met my dad and went home together, but they were still filming a drama very near our house."

   • Changed to: "We later met up with my dad and headed home together, but they were still filming a drama very close to our house."
   • Explanation: "Met up with" and "headed home" are more natural expressions. "Very close" is slightly more precise than "very near."