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We had talk time about how care for my son with husband. I have olny one son but sometimes I confuse treat way I doing to him right or not. He gets annoyed me I get to scream to him too. I didn't clam down him. I can't stand to disobey to me and break our promises little thing. I thougt whetever or not I force to him to do planed schedule made me. I 've reflected to giving stress him every night. I am sorry to him.So I am trying to some relax and finding another new habit for refresh.

We had talk time about how care for my son with husband. I have olny one son but sometimes I confuse treat way I doing to him right or not. He gets annoyed me I get to scream to him too. I didn't clam down him. I can't stand to disobey to me and break our promises little thing. I thougt whetever or not I force to him to do planed schedule made me. I 've reflected to giving stress him every night. I am sorry to him.So I am trying to some relax and finding another new habit for refresh.

CORRECTIONS:
 

Original: "We had talk time about how care for my son with husband."

Correction: "We had a discussion about how to care for our son."

Explanation: The phrase "talk time" is informal, so I replaced it with "discussion," which sounds more appropriate in this context. I also changed "my son with husband" to "our son" to reflect the shared responsibility between both parents.

Original: "I have olny one son but sometimes I confuse treat way I doing to him right or not."

Correction: "I have only one son, but sometimes I am unsure if the way I treat him is right or not."

Explanation: "Olny" was corrected to "only," and "confuse" was changed to "unsure" to convey uncertainty more clearly. I also restructured the sentence for clarity.

Original: "He gets annoyed me I get to scream to him too."

Correction: "He gets annoyed with me, and I end up yelling at him."

Explanation: I added "with" after "annoyed" for grammatical accuracy and changed "scream to" to "yelling at" to make the sentence sound more natural.

Original: "I didn't clam down him."

Correction: "I couldn't calm him down."

Explanation: "Clam" was corrected to "calm," and the sentence was rephrased to use the correct verb tense and structure.

Original: "I can't stand to disobey to me and break our promises little thing."

Correction: "I can't tolerate it when he disobeys me or breaks even small promises."

Explanation: The phrase "can't stand" was kept, but "disobey to me" was corrected to "disobeys me" for grammatical accuracy. I also restructured the sentence to be clearer and more concise.

Original: "I thougt whetever or not I force to him to do planed schedule made me."

Correction: "I wondered whether I was forcing him to follow a schedule I created."

Explanation: "Thougt" was corrected to "wondered," "whetever or not" to "whether," and "planed schedule made me" to "a schedule I created." This makes the sentence more coherent and grammatically correct.

Original: "I 've reflected to giving stress him every night. I am sorry to him."

Correction: "I've reflected on the stress I cause him every night, and I feel sorry for him."

Explanation: I changed "reflected to" to "reflected on" to match the correct preposition usage. The phrase "giving stress him" was rephrased to "the stress I cause him" for clarity and correctness.

Original: "So I am trying to some relax and finding another new habit for refresh."

Correction: "So I am trying to relax and find new habits to refresh myself."

Explanation: I rephrased "trying to some relax" to "trying to relax" for grammatical accuracy and made "finding another new habit for refresh" clearer by rephrasing it as "find new habits to refresh myself."

REVISED TEXT:

We had a discussion about how to care for our son. I have only one son, but sometimes I am unsure if the way I treat him is right or not. He gets annoyed with me, and I end up yelling at him. I couldn't calm him down. I can't tolerate it when he disobeys me or breaks even small promises. I wondered whether I was forcing him to follow a schedule I created. I've reflected on the stress I cause him every night, and I feel sorry for him. So I am trying to relax and find new habits to refresh myself. 

 


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