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When the monday come, my class switch desks. My desk(I think the desk he mentioned means a seat.) was front of left. My team had me, and one boy and two girls. My team had good two girls were smart. And boy was kind and fun. Two girls were best friends. I like this new desk.
Dear Erika Hello. Today, I think June was so tired and he often can't concentrate. I felt sorry about that. And thanks to you, his English conversation has improved. He is having fun learning English, even me. Form Mom.

When the monday come, my class switch desks. My desk(I think the desk he mentioned means a seat.) was front of left. My team had me, and one boy and two girls. My team had good two girls were smart. And boy was kind and fun. Two girls were best friends. I like this new desk.
Dear Erika Hello. Today, I think June was so tired and he often can't concentrate. I felt sorry about that. And thanks to you, his English conversation has improved. He is having fun learning English, even me. Form Mom.

 

This week, when Monday came, our class switched seats. My new seat is in the front left corner (or, at the front on the left side). My team consists of me, one boy, and two girls. The two girls on my team are really smart, and the boy is kind and fun. They're also best friends. I really like my new desk arrangement!

Dear Erika,

Hi! Today, I noticed that June seemed very tired and wasn't able to focus as much in class. I felt bad seeing him struggle. On a brighter note, I wanted to thank you for all your help. June's English conversation skills have definitely improved, and I can tell he's actually enjoying learning English – even me!

Love,

Mom

Here's what I changed:

  • Sentence flow: I improved the flow between sentences for better readability.
  • Word choice: I replaced "think" with more specific words like "noticed" and "seemed."
  • Formality: I maintained a friendly tone while making the writing a bit more formal for a message to a teacher.
  • Clarity: I clarified the sentence about the girls being best friends.
  • Punctuation: I added commas for better sentence structure.
  • Positive Reinforcement: I rephrased "June was so tired and he often can't concentrate" to focus on Erika's positive impact.

 

 


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