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Many people think trip to Hawaii is very special. During the winter time we can enjoy the nice and warm weather and beautiful beaches. But the most important thing in a trip is the relationship with members of the trip. In this trip I have been with my family who are my wife and my two daughters and my aunt in law and my sister in law. My wife and my children were always with me but my aunt in law and my sister in law wasn't with me many times. Actually they had been with us for last two trips so this trip wasn't new to us, but situation changed. My second daughter, unlike her sister, cries a lot and becomes irritating easily. I am a bit selfish but it wasn't exposed for the last two trips because the first trip was just for four of us and the second trip was with my first daughter who was not irritating. I should have been more calm and gentle but I acted without much thinking. I acted like I was with my family only. I should've thought much about my in laws because this was the only time they could judge me. Right now, after the trip, my wife told me that she would act to my mother as I acted to my in law during this trip. She has been so nice to my mother, so it sounds horrible. How can I control my temper and be nice to others? God, please touch my heart and make me humble. Think others first.

Many people think trip to Hawaii is very special. During the winter time we can enjoy the nice and warm weather and beautiful beaches. But the most important thing in a trip is the relationship with members of the trip. In this trip I have been with my family who are my wife and my two daughters and my aunt in law and my sister in law. My wife and my children were always with me but my aunt in law and my sister in law wasn't with me many times. Actually they had been with us for last two trips so this trip wasn't new to us, but situation changed. My second daughter, unlike her sister, cries a lot and becomes irritating easily. I am a bit selfish but it wasn't exposed for the last two trips because the first trip was just for four of us and the second trip was with my first daughter who was not irritating. I should have been more calm and gentle but I acted without much thinking. I acted like I was with my family only. I should've thought much about my in laws because this was the only time they could judge me. Right now, after the trip, my wife told me that she would act to my mother as I acted to my in law during this trip. She has been so nice to my mother, so it sounds horrible. How can I control my temper and be nice to others? God, please touch my heart and make me humble. Think others first.

 

Many people think a trip to Hawaii is very special. During the winter time we can enjoy the nice and warm weather and beautiful beaches. But the most important thing in a trip is the relationship with the group members of the trip. In this trip, I was have been with my family, who are my wife, and my two daughters, and my aunt in law and my sister in law. My wife and my children were always with me but my aunt in law and my sister in law weren’t wasn't with me at all many times. Actually, they had been with us on our for last two trips so this trip wasn't new to us, but the situation changed. My second daughter, unlike her sister, cries a lot and it made me becomes irritateding easily. I am a bit selfish but I wasn’t able to show it on our it wasn't exposed for the last two trips because the first trip was just for the four of us and the second trip was with my first daughter who was not irritating. I should have been more calm and gentle but I acted without much thinking. I acted like I was only with my family only. I should've thought much about my in laws because this was the only time they could judge me. Right now, after the trip, my wife told me that she would act to my mother as I acted to my in laws during this trip. She has been so nice to my mother, so it sounds horrible. How can I control my temper and be nice to others? God, please touch my heart and make me humble. Think others first.


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