Nov.15.2023

Yesterday was my birthday.
when I go to school my mom went to cake shop and buy strawberry cake.
I came back from school. I help my mom.
My mom and dad gave me a present for kick board.
When my dad came we ate a cake.

Yesterday was my birthday.
When I go to school, my mom went to the cake shop and bought a strawberry cake.
I came back from school. I help my mom.
My mom and dad gave me a present for kick board as a present.
When my dad came home, we ate the cake.

 

Note: Good day, Jian. I corrected your composition. You did well on this one. However, you have to learn how and when to use a comma. You can observe in my correction how and when to use it. The blue ones are the words that I added, while the green ones are the ones I corrected.