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There are five members in my family; grandmother, father, mother, younger brother and me. My grandmother is very kind and loves others, so she used to do a volunteer work at hospitals. But since she can't walk well now, she tends a small vegetable garden where pepper, garlic and lettuce are growing in. My parents run a family business, relating the stone. They are customising the original size of stones in terms of size and shape to meet their customers' needs. I think my dad is the standard of father in Korea as he is really diligent and puntual. He is working so hard for us. Also, my mom is a workaholic. She is the last one who leaves the office and that makes me feel proud of her but quite worried at the sametime. My brother is two years younger than me and he works at my parents' company. He started his own business with his best friend last year as a side job. It's a karaoke for one person or small group of people and this business is very popular.

I'm now a job seeker so I spend most of my time looking an online job site, writing a resume and applying. I prefer a job which I can take an advantage of my major and suits my personality. I could describe my personality with some adjectives; cheerful, positive and people-oriented. There is a saying that smiles are started by another smile. So I always try to smile. I love travelling and I've visited lots of countries including Malta, England and Croatia. The best place was definitely Italy. As Italy is known for the beautiful and romantic country, I enjoyed the architecture, food and mood there.

There are five members in my family; grandmother, father, mother, younger brother and me. My grandmother is very kind and loves others, so she used to do a volunteer work at hospitals. But since she can't walk well now, she tends a small vegetable garden where pepper, garlic and lettuce are growing in. My parents run a family business, relating the stone. They are customising the original size of stones in terms of size and shape to meet their customers' needs. I think my dad is the standard of father in Korea as he is really diligent and puntual. He is working so hard for us. Also, my mom is a workaholic. She is the last one who leaves the office and that makes me feel proud of her but quite worried at the sametime. My brother is two years younger than me and he works at my parents' company. He started his own business with his best friend last year as a side job. It's a karaoke for one person or small group of people and this business is very popular.

I'm now a job seeker so I spend most of my time looking an online job site, writing a resume and applying. I prefer a job which I can take an advantage of my major and suits my personality. I could describe my personality with some adjectives; cheerful, positive and people-oriented. There is a saying that smiles are started by another smile. So I always try to smile. I love travelling and I've visited lots of countries including Malta, England and Croatia. The best place was definitely Italy. As Italy is known for the beautiful and romantic country, I enjoyed the architecture, food and mood there.

Hi Janice, I made some slight modification in your composition,overall it's a good one :

There are five members in my family; grandmother, father, mother, younger brother and me. My grandmother is very kind and loves others, so she used to do a volunteer work at hospitals. But since she can't walk well now, she tends a small vegetable garden where pepper, garlic and lettuce are growing in. My parents run a family business, customizing stones. They are customizing the original size of stones in terms of size and shape to meet their customers' needs. I think my dad is an epitome of a typical father in Korea as he is really diligent and punctual. He works so hard for us. Also, my mom is a workaholic. She is the last one who leaves the office and that makes me feel proud of her but quite worried at the same time. My brother is two years younger than me and he works at my parents' company. He started his own business with his best friend last year as another job on the side to augment his income. They set up a karaoke room for one person or a small group of people and this business is very popular.

I'm now a job seeker so I spend most of my time looking for jobs online, writing and updating my resume keep me occupied. I prefer a job which I can take an advantage of my major and one that suits my personality. I could describe my personality with some adjectives; cheerful, positive and people-oriented. There is a saying that smiles starts from another smile. So I always try to smile. I love travelling and I've visited lots of countries including Malta, England and Croatia. The best place was definitely Italy. As Italy is known for beauty and romance, I enjoyed the architecture, food and mood of this country. It has made me a hopeless romantic.


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