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Today, I took an English test at school. I was worried that I would fail, but I ended up scoring better than I thought. I arrived home eager to tell my mom, but she was taking a nap. I had to go to an academy, so I didn't get to talk to her about it. I was a little disappointed, but I knew I would see her later and tell her all about it.

 

I made the following changes:

 

1. I added more detail about the test, such as the fact that it was an English test and that the speaker was worried about failing. This helps the reader understand the context of the sentence and why the speaker was so happy with their score.

2. I changed the word "hoping" to "eager" to make the speaker's excitement more clear.

3. I added the phrase "but she was taking a nap" to explain why the speaker didn't get to talk to their mom right away. This helps the reader understand why the speaker was disappointed.

4. I changed the word "sad" to "disappointed" to make the speaker's feelings more accurate. The speaker was still happy with their score, but they were disappointed that they didn't get to tell their mom right away.