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I went to Jeju with my husband. I’ve been to Jeju 3 times, but my hubby haven’t. So I wanted to show him good places in Jeju where I visited. Fortunately we traveled in Spring, it was nice weather and we could see a cherry blossom tree. We really expected to stay in Hotel, where we can see a sea view. Because we live in city we have no chance to see sceneries. We like coffee, so we went to coffee shop a lot. we heard that the carrot from Jeju is very delicious, so we tried to have coffee with carrot cake. The coffee and carrot cake were a good combination. Of course we had fresh sea food. It was great memory for me, because I was with great travel mate.

I went to Jeju with my husband. I’ve been to Jeju 3 times, but my hubby haven’t. So I wanted to show him good places in Jeju where I visited. Fortunately we traveled in Spring, it was nice weather and we could see a cherry blossom tree. We really expected to stay in Hotel, where we can see a sea view. Because we live in city we have no chance to see sceneries. We like coffee, so we went to coffee shop a lot. we heard that the carrot from Jeju is very delicious, so we tried to have coffee with carrot cake. The coffee and carrot cake were a good combination. Of course we had fresh sea food. It was great memory for me, because I was with great travel mate.

CORRECTIONS:

I have been to Jeju for more than a couple of times but my hubby have not so we decided to spend the weekend in the beautiful island. I wanted to show him the places that I have been to during my past visits and we were fortunate to have travelled in spring. The weather was perfect and we were able to catch a glimpse of the Cherry Blossoms in Jeju. The flower has its distinct pattern and color that is different from the common blossoms in the main island. We made a reservation in a hotel and made sure that our room has the view of the sea because we live in a city and having a room that opens to the vast sea would have been a totally relaxing experience.

 

My husband and I love a good brew of coffee so we spent most of our time in the coffee shop and we also tried the famous carrot cake that the people of Jeju speak with pride, indeed it was delicious. It blended well with the hot coffee. We also indulged in the fresh sea food, another pride of Jeju Island. I had fond memories during our stay and it made it more special because I was with my best travel partner, my better half.

 

*** Hi Haley,if you noticed; I modified your composition a little bit. When composing, I want you to try to speak your thoughts in a creative way.Play with words and try to use the list of synonyms for you to never run out of words to say. Try to be poetic too! wink..wink..


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