Today, I went to school with my friends. I studied math, Korean, English, science. While lunch time, I ate my lunch. And I went my homebase. I took book and pencilcase. I listened two more class. After school, I went to my house and played game, ate my dinner. I went my english academy. After 2 hours, I went my house and prepared for joy english class. I'm so tired
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Today, I went to school with my friends. I studied math, Korean, English, and science. While lunchtime, I ate my lunch. And I went to my home base. I took a book and a pencil case. I listened to two more classes. After school, I went to my house and played a game, and ate my dinner. I went to my English academy. After 2 hours, I went to my house and prepared for joy English class. I'm so tired.
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Note: You did great on explaining what happened to your day. Your tenses are all correct. Don't forget to use preposition such as to, in, and on. Same goes also for your conjunctions (e.g. and, but, if ). Overall, your essay is getting better. ~ Don't forget to take some rest even for 5-10 minutes.
