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issue 1 - question 5,6,7

5. do you usually come home early? why?

When i just turned to 20 i came home late about 3 or 4 in the morning or maybe more later.
Since i turned to 20 i could drink alcohol legally and allowed to do whatever i want! i felt like everything was new and thought i became completely an adult. i was out of control. i never listend to my parents even though they got angry at me about that.
But now i try to come home as soon as possible. nothing is new anymore, tired.


6. who do you think are busier, kids or adults?

Of course Adults. They don't get a pocket money from their parents any longer. They need to make money themself, they need to see people even they don't want, they need to do their hobbies, they put alot of efforts to have self-development.(self-improvement?) Also they need to be in realationship.
I think being an adult is tiring.

7. Which do you think is more important. making money or spending time with friend or family?

I would be more happy when i spend time with my people who i love. but if we don't work to make money i think it's alomost im possible to manage our daily life in the normal. Actually i think we make money to spend a great time with family or friens.
so i have come to the conclusion that making money is very important to do what i want to do.

5. do you usually come home early? why?

When I just turned 20 I usually came home late, about 3 or 4 in the morning or maybe later than that.
Since I turned  20 I could drink alcohol legally and allowed to do whatever I want! i felt like everything was new and thought I became completely an adult. I was out of control. I never listened to my parents even though they got angry at me about that.
But now I try to come home as soon as possible. Nothing is new anymore and I feel tired of it.


6. who do you think are busier, kids or adults?

Of course Adults. They don't get a pocket money from their parents anymore. They need to make money by themself, they need to see people even they don't want to, they need to do their hobbies, they need to put alot of efforts to have self-development.(self-improvement) Also they need to be in realationship.
I think being an adult is tiring.

7. Which do you think is more important. making money or spending time with friend or family?

I would be more happy when I spend time with the people who I love. But, if we don't work to make money i think it's almost impossible to manage our normal daily lives. Actually, I think we make money to spend a great time with family or friends.
so I have come to a conclusion that making money is very important to do the things that I really want to do.

 

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Hello there Rim! Your answers were all good. Just be more attentive with your spelling. But, overall you did a good job.


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