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At first, To be honest, I thought that fathers have to work hard and earn lots of money in my childhood.
I don't know well about money and time, because I was so young at that time. So I evaluted money is best.
At that time, my father and mother always play with me, so I don't understand family's thanks.

But now, I think that money is not all of life. Many people dreams to earn lots of money. Making lots of money can help people to live comfortable. But it never bring happiness.
For example, There are two people. One has no money, but have good family. And other has lots of money but no family. Who can live more happy? I think the first person would be more happy than second person.

In my case, My father and mother both of them work to earn money. So I missed them so much.
I could understand their real love for me through growing up.
These days, I understand them. Because they work hard because of me. So i want to help them(do the dishes, clean the house, ect..)

Earn lots of money is important for all the people.
But we have to remember that earning money is not all of life, and there is a more important thing in the world. It will be our family.
How about spending thime with your family in this winter vacation? Any activites will be okay. Just spending time with family is special and best! Enjoy your times~
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Teacher, How about your oppinion?
Thank you!


Honestly, at first, I thought that parents need to work hard and earn lots of money to raise their children.
I didn't  know well about money at that time because I was so young.  

 My father and mother used to play with me when i was a little girl and  I didn't understand my family's situation at that time.

But now, I think that money is not all that matters in my life . Many people dream to earn lots of money. Making lots of money can help people to live a comfortable life. But it never brings happiness.
For example, There are two people. One has no money, but have a good family and other has lots of money but no family. Who can live a happier life? I think the first person would be happier than second person.

In my case, My father and mother both work to earn money. So I missed them so much.
I  understand that they are showing  their  love for me through raising me well.
These days, I understand them that they need to work hard because of me. So i want to help them in the most simple way like washing the  dishes, clean the house, ect..)

Earning lots of money is important for all the people.
But we have to remember that earning money shouldn't consumed our whole life. There are  more important thing in the world and that would be our family.
How about spending time with them  in this winter vacation? Any activites would be okay. Spending our time with our family in the most special way and be the best with what you can be! Have a great day~
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Teacher, How about your oppinion?
Thank you!


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