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Last winter we had traveled for 1 week. The end of the journey I and my siblings got sick. After We got better and we noticed my brother's bike which put on the playground before our trip was gone. My mom was tried to find but gave up. because there was no marks which was his on it. 1 month later we passed by, we found his bike. we reported his missed bike to the police at once. the cops mobilized soon. but his bike couldn't get back to him right away. because It locked and couldn't be untied.

Last winter, we had traveled for 1 week. At the end of the journey, I and my siblings got sick. After we got better, and we noticed my brother's bike which he had put on the playground before our trip was gone. My mom was tried to find it but gave up because there were no marks which was his on it. of it. 1 month later we passed by, we finally found his bike. We reported his missing bike to the police at once and the cops mobilized soon. However, but his bike couldn't get back wasn't returned to him right away because it's locked and couldn't be untied. 

 

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1. [because there were no marks which was his on it.]

use of it [we use 'of' because we are referring to the missing bike.]

2. [his bike couldn't get back wasn't returned]
 
'wasn't returned' is more appropriate. 
 
When you use 'his bike couldn't go back', it is grammatically incorrect because the bike cannot go back on it's own. 

 


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