My opinion about your saying

I don’t agree what you said that modern women get old so fast. Because woman who live in modern society can control easily their life.
So even working women a lot like me could find their free time to rest to reward their busy time. In conclusion, modern women are get old slow.

 

           I disagree on what you said about modern women get old so fast, because women who live in the modern society can easily control their lives, so even working women can find their free time to rest and be rewarded for being busy. In conclusion, modern women get old slowly. 

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     I arranged some sentences that you made, because of the words are not put in their right position and also there are words aren't necessary that I omitted. Please check the corrections that I've done on your writing. Thank you!