About my favorite holiday.

My favorite holiday is New Year's Day.
In New Year's Day my family and I eat rice-cake soup and visit my relatives houses.
My sibling and I bow my parents and my elder relatives.
We bow to my parents and my elder relatives and then receive our favorite New Year's cash gift.
I like New Year's day because I can meet my relatives and receive our favorite New Year's cash gift.
I hope New Year's Day comes soon.

My favorite holiday is New Year's Day.
On New Year's Day, my family and I eat rice-cake soup. Then, we visit our relatives.
My sibling and I bow to our parents and to our elder relatives.
We bow to our parents and to our elder relatives and then, we receive some New Year's cash gift.
I like New Year's day because I can meet my relatives and we receive some cash gift. It's one of favorite thing every holiday.
I hope New Year's Day will come soon.